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Data File. 01 Comic
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Lord Anzius
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Okay. This is my first comic.... on YWS so please critt. I ranked it R because of the sexual comments etc...
These comics tell the story of the lives of data... on Jake's computer..l. and the computer is a Mapple. =P
I'm not good at drawing so be gentel on that area... please
These are drafts
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| Posted: Fri Oct 10, 2008 7:54 am Post subject: |
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hee hee...
Your actual jokes are awesome and your drawings aren't bad at all - but it's unclear. You should make clear outlines between boxes and better indications of which data is saying which dialogue box. I've already read your other R-rated one and the same thing applies - the second one especially was HILARIOUS!!! but still unclear.
So anyway, sharpen up the lines, clear away the messy bits, and you'll boil it down to pure awesomeness. 
Cheers!
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| Posted: Fri Oct 10, 2008 8:44 pm Post subject: :P |
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 lol, funny, it is unclar with the lines and stuff but im useless at drawing comics so youll always be better than me! Those people talking... they lok so funny and cute - what are they? heads? lololol
really liked it, going to reveiws some of your other stuff now!  keep up the good work
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Awsome dude how did you send your jokes on this website? I want to do that too!
Great job. This joke made me happy!
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This is awesome! I have no idea how to draw, so these are amazing to you. Nice work. Keep it up. Lol.
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