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Elizabeth
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Help me with this, it's just so far a summary of a poem, and I need pretty much:
1. Talent
2. Talent
3. A New title
4. Talent
5. Help/Opinions
Enjoy...
You said you loved me for who I was
I was a lively dancer
I was a lovely woman
I was a social person
Never did you say you loved me for who I am
I am a drug addict
I am a liar
I am a cheater
Ten years change people
Change opinions and thoughts
And it can mess with their heads
And trick them into success
Trick them into eternal happiness
When all it's doing is killing them, killing me
Taking a clock and turning the days foreward
During one single joyous occasion
So it seems to last an eternity
I wish I can change
I wish I was who you once loved
But I can't change |
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| Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 5:08 am Post subject: |
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Hmm, kinda flows... blocky, cant explain it. Then again I dont read many poems.
Occasion is spelt with one s and 2 c's
success is spelt with 2 c's |
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Elizabeth
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Sponson Light
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| Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 5:15 am Post subject: |
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