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Between Two Suns

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 11:39 pm    Post subject: Between Two Suns Reply with quote

Between Two Suns: (the Spinning Wheels of Recorded Time)



solarwinds a linear virginity 



i see the empiraen lights

from here

here beside you slipsleepingform

form the thoughts that

reach the end of the universe

and the restaurant there in

record time

time where my heart flutters

because you’re so close

close enough to engulf

my soul



soulshinning



beneath our rembrantstars

and vangoghscars

that fade in the mornlight

our semisoulsearching

leads to brokenmirrorshards

and that lonely houseofcards:

ruins the tastebuds dry 

a queenofhearts and all

her lonely counterparts

seize the day but nothinglike a

carpe diem

daylimbs crowd nightfancies

too close for comfort

too dark for ease

and we’re falling too fast

full of knowledge

for any reminiscent innocence to break

the fall

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 5:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

perfect, man, thanks a bunch. It's very very beautiful and deep.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 10:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

thank you dear for the review.

if you interested check out Solarwinds: Life in Linear Virginity (Cheese Holes) which is the story behind the poem.

cheers CL

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