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Between Two Suns
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Caligula's Launderette
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 11:39 pm Post subject: Between Two Suns |
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Between Two Suns: (the Spinning Wheels of Recorded Time)
solarwinds a linear virginity
i see the empiraen lights
from here
here beside you slipsleepingform
form the thoughts that
reach the end of the universe
and the restaurant there in
record time
time where my heart flutters
because you’re so close
close enough to engulf
my soul
soulshinning
beneath our rembrantstars
and vangoghscars
that fade in the mornlight
our semisoulsearching
leads to brokenmirrorshards
and that lonely houseofcards:
ruins the tastebuds dry
a queenofhearts and all
her lonely counterparts
seize the day but nothinglike a
carpe diem
daylimbs crowd nightfancies
too close for comfort
too dark for ease
and we’re falling too fast
full of knowledge
for any reminiscent innocence to break
the fall |
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PsyLynx
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 5:28 pm Post subject: |
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| perfect, man, thanks a bunch. It's very very beautiful and deep. |
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Caligula's Launderette
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 10:32 pm Post subject: |
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thank you dear for the review.
if you interested check out Solarwinds: Life in Linear Virginity (Cheese Holes) which is the story behind the poem.
cheers CL |
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