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By Sun, By Moon - Chap. 11
By Sun, By Moon - Chap. 11

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 26, 2008 5:22 pm    Post subject: The Paranormal Reply with quote

I haven't posted in this story for a while, and people have been keen to find out what will happen next. To be completely honest, I don't know where this story is going. There will be two more after this, so I guess I better start summing it all up.

This is part 5/7.

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Paranormal [Par-a-nor-mal] –adjective

1. Of or pertaining to the claimed occurrence of an event or perception without scientific explanation, as psychokinesis, extrasensory perception, or other purportedly supernatural phenomena.

I cradled the football in my arms. The ball was wet; I didn’t know if it was from the rain or the tears. It all mixed in together. My back was pressed firmly against a thick tree. The bark was coarse and rubbed against my skin, inflaming it.

I needed more pain. The many scars up and down my backside and wrist were beginning to fade. I needed the pain to go on. I needed it to numb my senses.

It’d been four weeks since Lillian’s funeral. It’d been four weeks since I had used the game that killed her. No. I didn’t kill her. Richard did. Ever since he had gotten that board, things had been happening. Things that have never happened before. It only brought on more and more pain. Unbearable pain.

After four weeks, you would think the pain would go away. It doesn’t. It only gets worse.

I could see Jen out of the corner of my eye. She was walking into the park cautiously, looking directly at me. Carrying a schoolbag in one hand and a book in another, she looked like she was going to do her homework in the park. Next to me. In the rain.

I looked back down and clutched the football tighter against my chest. I rocked back and forth, gently, as if I were swaying with the wind.

When she approached me, I didn’t look up. She sat next to me, on the other side of the tree, careful to keep her distance. I closed my eyes and gnawed on my lip.

Anything for more pain.

Jen sighed and spoke.

“Stevie…”

“Jen, please,” I muttered. “Go away. I want to be alone right now. Please. Just go.”

“It’s been hard for all of us, Stevie. Things will only get worse if you don’t talk to us and tell us how we can help.”

“I’m not the only one that needs help.”

There was a charged silence between us. I could feel anger boiling inside of my gut. I shifted away from her. She shifted closer.

“Steve, you’ve been cutting!” Jen cried. I examined my left arm. There were more cuts than last time Jen had seen me. They were bright, red, and swollen, like a zit.

“So?”

“Steve, please come home. You’ve been out here for hours.”

“I don’t want to talk about it.”

“Steve—” Jen began reaching out to me, but I shoved her arm back.

“I said leave me the hell alone!” I shouted, and pushed Jen away from me. I curled up and placed my head between my legs. I was shaking.

I could faintly hear Jen sobbing. To block out the noise, I began humming. The notes were rushed. I needed something to block out that insanely annoying cry. I rocked my body harder, and the rain pelted the back of my head. I shivered but continued humming.

Jen was still crying.

“Shut up,” I whispered. “Shut up, shut up, shut up.” Slowly, I raised my head and glared at her.

“Go away! Now! I’m sick of you! I’m sick of everyone! Go away!” I elevated my arm and formed a fist. Her eyes widened.

“You wouldn’t hit me.”

I glared her in eyes. They were soft. Moist. Idiotic and weak.

I roared and swept my fist at her face. It hit her directly in the jaw. I could feel her flesh rip as I dug my fingernails into her skin. Something hidden stirred within me as I attempted to grab her throat. I threw myself upon her and punched and slugged and bit and cried.

She was screaming, but I couldn’t hear her anymore. She was trying to get away, but to no prevail.

I slugged her again, in the cheek. She face planted into the wet grass. There was a small blood puddle next to her mouth. Again, I took the opportunity to grab her throat.

I did.

It felt warm under my trembling hands.

Too warm.

I took her throat between my hands and squeezed. Her eyes bulged. I smiled. Her face was bright red; if it was from the blood, or lack of oxygen, I didn’t know.

I could feel the blood flowing through her tender neck.

It was alive. No. She was alive.

What was I doing?

I stopped squeezing and hesitantly pulled away from her. The boiling rage simmered. Jen was lying in the grass, motionless. Had I killed her?

I thought about where murderers go. Jail. Prison. Thirty to life.

Hell.

H.E.L.L. That was where the spirit had gone. The spirit was a murderer. It had killed Lillian. Now it was killing Jen.

“Jen? Jen?” She didn’t answer. She was breathing, though. I sighed in relief. Slowly, I shook her shoulder. Her eyelids fluttered.

“Jen, I’m so sorry. I’m so sorry! I didn’t mean to--this is all my fault--what have I done? I almost killed you--I’m so sorry--please forgive me--do you need a hospital--please answer me! Jen! Jen? Jen… Jen.”

Everything was slurring together. The rain melted my thoughts into a sticky mess.

“I hate you,” Jen whispered. I gasped and leaned closer.

“Jen! You’re alright!” What she had spoken didn’t even faze me.

“I hate you. Get away from me, you creep.” She slowly opened her eyes. They were bloodshot. Jen glared at me.

“Jen, I’m so sorry. I don’t know what—”

“Leave me alone!” She slapped me across the face and pushed me. Then she clumsily stood up and began to run, leaving me alone in the park.

I glanced around me. The football had blood on it.

-

A week later, I got a call from Richard.

“I bought another Ouija board,” he muttered. I could tell in his voice that he was ashamed of what he’d done.

“Oh,” I replied. I really wanted to tell Richard was an idiot he was. This was the third Ouija board that he had gotten now, wasn’t it? I thought that the first one was more than enough evil to last a lifetime.

“I’ve talked to Lillian, Steve,” Richard went on. “Last night, and the night before. You need to come over tonight. She needs to talk to all of us. She’s going to warn us about something.”

“About what?”

“She won’t tell me.”

“That’s bull. Richard, stop buying those boards. You’re becoming too attached to them. I don’t believe you anymore. I don’t believe anyone anymore. Everyone has been so freaking stupid after Lillian died. I’m sick of those boards, I’m sick of ghosts, I’m sick of being sick of everything, and most of all, I’m sick of you. You’re the one that made us play that Ouija board game. You’re the one that got Lillian killed. It’s all your fault, Richard. I hate you.” I hung up.

-

Later that week, Brianne knocked on my door. As I opened it, I could tell that something was wrong. Something was horribly wrong.

“Brianne?” I asked.

“I need to, um, I need to sit. You need to sit, too. I need to tell you something.”

“What? What’s wrong?” I invited her into the house, and she sat on one of the couches. I took the other. I stared into her eyes.

“Roger’s disappeared. Gone. No one knows where he is. We knew this was going to happen. And we didn’t even try to stop it…” Brianne suddenly broke into a dramatic wail.

I reached out to her, alarmed. “What’s going on? Answer me!”

After Brianne had regained herself, she spoke, “We had another séance. You and Roger didn’t come.”

I sighed. “That’s what happened? You’re all freaked out about a séance? I told Richard that he should never have bought it!”

“But something happened in the séance! Something that has never happened before!” Brianne cried, and wiped her eyes.

“What? What happened?” I asked.

“Lillian told us who was going to be killed next.”

I leaned back into my couch, sighing. I rolled my eyes.

“That board is a load of bull, Brianne. Don’t believe it.”

“Lillian told us Roger was going to be killed next, Steve. Listen to me! She told us he was going to be killed. And now look. He’s gone. Disappeared. Without a trace.”

“He probably went to the store and got lost. That kid is accident prone,” I muttered with a sour tone.

“There’s a search party out looking for him, Steve. This is serious.”

I bit my lip, not knowing what to say, or how to say it.

“Something is going wrong. We need to stop the spirit that’s going to kill all of us. It has a plan. We need to find that plan, and destroy the spirit. Or at least send it back to hell, where it came from. We need your help, Steve. You’re a part of this too.”

“Yeah, well, what if I don’t want to be? Did you ever think of that? What if I didn’t want to do that freaking séance? It’s all Richard’s fault!” I roared, my blood boiling rapidly.

Brianne glanced down at her shoes for a moment.

“We’re all part of the group. We need to end this. Please, Steve. Please help us. We need you. We need all of us to do this.”

I didn’t reply. I only leaned further back into the couch. After a while, Brianne spoke again.

“Jen says that she wants to break up with you. She would have done this personally, but you won’t answer her calls, texts, or emails.”

“Good. I hate her. I hate her, and I hate Richard. They’re both idiots.”

“Steve!” Brianne cried, flinging herself up from the couch. “You’re such a moron!” She walked herself to the front door and glanced back at me once more.

“Even though you’re being stupid right now, I’m serious about you being a part of this. We are all going to die if you don’t help us. Roger’s missing. You have to realize that. Every one of us will go missing if you don’t help. Please.”

With that, she walked out and slammed the door shut.

-

“Hey. This is Richard. I’m not able to answer right now, so if you’ll please leave your name, number and message, I’ll get back to you.”

“Richard, this is Steve. I’m sorry for being such jerk. I’m assuming you sent Brianne over here to persuade me? I was a jerk to her too. I’m sorry.

“The reason I’m calling is because I wanted to tell you that I want to help you guys. I don’t know what the plan is, but you guys are my friends. You’re my world to me. I can’t desert you now.

“When’s the next time that we're going to meet up? Count me in. I’ll be there.”


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PostPosted: Fri Sep 26, 2008 8:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey Jared!!!

Thanks for telling me you posted this. I must confess, I didn't like this as much as the other parts. Although it had all of the suspense and wonderfully you moments...I just didn't really like it. To be more specific, it was too abrupt. The last part in the story really confused me because why would Steve all of a sudden change his mind about helping his friends? And why would Jen not tell someone what Steve did to her? When Brianne said that she was calling him, that just didn't make sense to me. I don't know, maybe I'm reading too far into this but this wasn't the best part in the series, in my opinion. I'm not saying it was horrible or anything because it wasn't. Its just that I know you can do better. All in all, I can't wait to read what happens next. The plot is really thickening and I wish you luck with writing the next part. Oh I hate it when you start a story and can't seem to figure out what happens next. Writer's block is a terrible thing.
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PostPosted: Sat Sep 27, 2008 4:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Jared -

As always, excellent. You're really onto something here with this piece. It's been staggeringly successful so far and I have no doubt it will continue to be successful, but you've got to make the ending live up to the rest of the story. The ending is always the hardest. It's what makes or breaks a story and it's approaching quickly. You know this. So if you haven't already, sit down for an hour or so and just brainstorm. Put together a fillibuster ending before planning anything else.

No pressure, right?

Anyway.

[one flew over the cuckoo's nest]

In the opening scene, you described Steve as a kid with his sanity teetering on the edge. He's obviously pretty crazy, he obviously can't think right anymore. You did an excellent job characterizing him and making him stand out from every other character involved in this story, which is something you haven't been able to do until now. So bravo. As of now, Steve is my favorite character.

But then in the last scene, it's like you took everything back. It's like you got scared with how fleshy Steve had become. You got scared because he punched and almost killed Jen. In the last scene with Brianne he was too lucid and sane and normal(ish). He wasn't the strong, screen-stealing character you described in the first scene. I'm sad now.

My advice here is to keep the characterization consistant. If Steve is crazy once, he'll be crazy twice, yes? Try not to flip-flop with his traits.

[parting words]

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“I hate you,” Jen whispered. I gasped and leaned closer.

“Jen! You’re alright!” What she had spoken didn’t even faze me.

“I hate you. Get away from me, you creep.” She slowly opened her eyes. They were bloodshot. Jen glared at me.


If you asked me to point out the biggest weak point in this piece, I would point to this dialogue exchange. It's terrible. It's forced and sudden and it just messes up the whole flow of the scene. My advice would be to change how Jen reacts to nearly being murdered by a friend. Instead of having Jen "lying motionless in the grass", have her scrambling to her feet and screaming at the top of her lungs. Have her shriek 'I hate you' instead of whisper it. Give me fireworks, not christmas lights (whatever that means Wink )

Anyway. Awesome job once again. Keep writing. I want more.

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PostPosted: Sat Sep 27, 2008 7:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ah, Jared, as magnificent as always. I continue to be impressed by you.

I must say, Steve's character here reminded me a little of Rorschach from "Watchmen" (though, having just read it, everything reminds me of "Watchmen" ;D ) in the second half of the story. He's just treating everything as if it doesn't matter, even though it is and he might feel strongly about it, he treats it all with a monotone disinterest. As great as it was, it just doesn't jive with the first half, where he is extremely involved internally and trying to kill his friends and whatnot. Both bits are awesome and all, but they aren't coinciding with the character. It reads as if there were two different people. (all hail the power of character voice!)

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They were bright, red, and swollen, like a zit.


I loved this image for some reason. I just knew exactly what they looked like immediately. The word "zit" did it more for me than the description ("bright, red and swollen"). It just conjured up a great, great picture in my head.

Nice work here. It wasn't my favorite out of all these pieces, but it was definitely a kick-fanny read. I can't wait to see how you wrap this entire thing up. Good luck figuring it all out!

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PostPosted: Sun Sep 28, 2008 2:05 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey Jared!

Thanks for messaging me when you posted this, it was as great as the others! I liked how your portrayed Steve's emotions, how he acted like he didn't care about it but he really did... I can relate to that so his nonchalance made it really believable.

This part was really good. The only thing was that there wasn't too much suspense, but it worked. You did a really great job. Can't wait for more!

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PostPosted: Sun Sep 28, 2008 2:19 pm    Post subject: Re: The Paranormal Reply with quote

Hey Jared darling, Stella here! Thanks for telling me this has been posted. I know I didn't critique the last one so this will have to make up for it.

I. NITPICKS

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I looked back down and clutched the football tighter against my chest. I rocked back and forth, gently, as if I were swaying with the wind.


Why does he have the football, has he been playing or is it a prop?


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“Steve, you’ve been cutting!” Jen cried. I examined my left arm. There were more cuts than last time Jen had seen me. They were bright, red, and swollen, like a zit.


I think an action should accompany the exclamation. Does she grab his wrist? How does she see? Also, try "zits." I'm not fond of the word either, it's very American, but...


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She was screaming, but I couldn’t hear her anymore.


There's absolutely nobody in the park to see this? It's only a bit of rain, after all!
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I took her throat between my hands and squeezed. Her eyes bulged. I smiled. Her face was bright red; if it was from the blood, or lack of oxygen, I didn’t know.


Give her more expression.


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“Leave me alone!” She slapped me across the face and pushed me. Then she clumsily stood up and began to run, leaving me alone in the park.


That's another thing. Why didn't she fight back to begin with? She seems strong enough. Give her some spunk. I don't hold with girls who let themselves get beaten up.

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“Jen says that she wants to break up with you. She would have done this personally, but you won’t answer her calls, texts, or emails.”


The list sounds a bit weird. Also, wants to break up with him? Nothing stronger than that? She's forgiving...

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You’re my world to me. I can’t desert you now.


His world? It hasn't seemed like it.

II. YOU KNOW WHAT I'M GOING TO SAY... BEGINS WITH A C...

Characterization!

Really, we need more! At first, I always thought that Steve was the jock, but he's crying? He says he hates them but he wants to help them? Why will he talk to Brianne but not Jen?

All in all, who is he? I think you said in another post he and Jen were drifting away from the group. So are they really his world?

You're dealing with a different MC each time and I understand it's difficult, but it's still worth trying to develop them all as much as is possible. You know what I mean? Lillian was well done, but she's dead!

Also (this should probably be in Nitpicks), Richard didn't buy the board, did he?

III. FEAR FACTOR

There wasn't as much weirdness in this one. It certainly wasn't nice, but he beats up his girlfriend and then their friend goes missing? Sounds more like an Australian soap than a horror movie. There's not much strangeness in it. Not necessarily a bad thing, just a comment.

IV. CLARITY

Is he being possessed when he attacks Jen? I really wasn't sure... Also, does he usually cut, or just for the past few weeks? Clear it up for us, please.

V. OVERALL

I'm being harsh. No, I enjoyed it. It just needs a bit of tweaking, that's all.

PM me if you have any questions, and I hope I've helped!

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PostPosted: Tue Sep 30, 2008 2:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey Jared,

Although your writing is good, this part seemed a little rushed - like you're starting to get fed up with the series and are trying to get it over and done with. I'd rather wait several weeks for an amazing part then have a good part every week, if you get what I mean.

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There were more cuts than last time Jen had seen me. They were bright, red, and swollen, like a zit.

The first sentence needs a 'the' before 'last'. The second sentence doesn't need a comma after bright and I don't think you need one after swollen either. I don't particularly like the use of the word 'zit' but I do understand what you are trying to get at.

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“You wouldn’t hit me.”

Can we have some description of how this is said? Disbelief? Anger? Horror? Perhaps some description of what Jen looks like here (her hair wet and hanging limply, her mouth slightly open, etc) would also enrich the scene.

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She face planted into the wet grass

I don't know what you're trying to say here but this sentence just doesn't make any sense.

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“I hate you,” Jen whispered. I gasped and leaned closer.
“Jen! You’re alright!” What she had spoken didn’t even faze me.
“I hate you. Get away from me, you creep.” She slowly opened her eyes. They were bloodshot. Jen glared at me.
“Jen, I’m so sorry. I don’t know what—”
“Leave me alone!” She slapped me across the face and pushed me. Then she clumsily stood up and began to run, leaving me alone in the park.

As already pointed out, this bit is slightly messy and the dialogue is weak. I think you need to make sure that you keep these points realistic and intense, so the reader is unable to avert their eyes from your work.

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I really wanted to tell Richard was an idiot he was.

'Was' should be 'what'.

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And now look. He’s gone. Disappeared. Without a trace.”

Uh-oh. Avoid the cliche here. I think that Brianne needs to re-think what she just said.
Also, at this point the reader is really lacking much description. Sure, we get the occasional 'I rolled my eyes' but show the reader the living room, what Brianne looks like, sounds like, smells like even. Does her presence make him remember what he did to Jen? Does it make him feel guilty? Angry?

Overall, your writing is still gripping and you have a good pace going. I like that Steve stands out from the rest of the group. Your dialogue faltered in a few places and your description wasn't quite up to par in this piece. Just remember that we want to know everything you can see in your head - but we won't unless you describe it to us.

Let me know when you post more,

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PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 2:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

*Breaths a sigh of relief*

I was very scared about what I was going to read here, but it actually wasn't too bad. I think it was more focused on Steve than on the creepy stuff, it wasn't as scary (this is good, you should continue this way)

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The football had blood on it.


Nice way to tie it all together.

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This was the third Ouija board that he had gotten now, wasn’t it?


So he's bought three since the beginning of the series, or three since part four? Expand a bit here, it's a little confusing.

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Every one of us will go missing if you don’t help.


Why would they all go missing? Lillian didn't go missing. She hung herself in her cupboard. I think you should phrase this differently.


Well, not the worst part. I liked Steve, especially in the first part. Well, I didn't like what he was doing to Jen (oh, I forgot to tell you, I thought that part was very well written), but I liked the characterization, and also the lack of scary-stuff.

Because I might never be able to sleep until I know how this ends, prepare to be eternally annoyed, or at least until you finish this. There's sill Jen and Brianne to go, and I need to sleep soon.

Good job, and please post soon!

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PostPosted: Thu Oct 30, 2008 12:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey, Jared!

I'm sorry it's taken me so long to review this – I haven't even been on for such a long time! So I just have to get used to reviewing again.

It was great to read this story again. It's so exciting and even disturbing in some parts, but in a good way. I didn't really find anything for you to correct, except for this one:

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What she had spoken


I think what she had said would fit better, now it just feels awkward.

This part was very good, I sickly liked the Jen-Steve conflict, because... I can't even explain. It just fits into the story.

Wow. I feel great. This was my first review for a long, long time. I'm alive! Very Happy

See you around, and keep writing!


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