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A Celtic Forever
A Celtic Forever

by WarriorOfTheBrimstone in Narrative Poetry
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 5:45 am    Post subject: The Mansion chaptr 6 part 1 Reply with quote

This is the first part of chapter 6 I'll post the last part soon. Please critt

THE UNDERWORLD

We were in a small hall. It looked like one of the metropolitan halls around London.

The atmosphere was slightly damp and moist.

Mike was already walking to the monstrous machine.

“What is that apparatus?” I asked amazed. The apparatus called “UNDERWORLD EXPRESS” looked like a train; but it seemed to have horns and instead of rails it used half tracks. The machine moved in a narrow opening in the ground. Also the machine looked a bit hostile.

“That my dear friend is a Horain. It moves with the merged powers of alcohol and meat.” Replied the gnome in a jolly manner. We closed up with the Horain, when they got just next to it; I could see many and many more windows and doors on the machine.

As they were just in front of one of the doors it swing open and we stepped in.

I looked around me; everything was like in a luxury motel. There was even a crystal lamp on the ceiling.

We went into a cabin. There were some other gnomes that looked very busy. There was also a troll; this troll was even more hairy than Anu. The troll was very round and its face was unbelievably ugly. The troll’s nose looked like a giant potato.

The troll looked at me for I while before it opened its mouth “A HUMAN!” it shouted, the gnomes lifted their heads and looked at me. They just looked at me.

One of the gnomes looked down at Mike, “Miko!? I should have known. What did you think? Bringing human here. I should have guessed it was you.” Said the gnome; he was wearing glasses and he was fairly bald, he also had a small black suit on him.

Mike looked at the gnome for a while “What do you mean by that? I’ve never brought a human here before, Olli, now have I?” Mike replied sternly. The other gnome besides Olli had already lost interest and started reading a newspaper. The troll had fell asleep of boredom.

“No, I mean that the only one stupid enough to bring a human to the underworld is you.” Answered Olli.

“Hmph.” Mike muttered and beckoned me to sit with him besides the troll. The troll smelled foul and I was sure I could see something moving in its thick fur.

After a short while the Horain started to move. It rolled smoothly. As I looked out of the window I could see small colonies and big cities spread just below us, as we were riding? (Driving?) Over a great tall bridge. The bridge, I was sure of it, went through all of England. Well that was what I thought so I decided to asked Mike. He had answered that it truly did go through all of England, and also Ireland, and all the way to Paris, France.

The town looked full of life. Mike had told me that this was just a small portion of all the towns even in the England area of the underworld. The towns and cities swarmed with different kind of creatures, I could see some of them even from the Horain.

Olli and his companion had left the Horain on the third station where we had stopped. The stations were quite pale and resembled very remarkably the normal train stations above ground. Soon after Olli had left, at the sixth station the Horain spoke Gullon.

Mike stood up and beckoned me to follow him. We walked out of the Horain, I watched the monstrous thing go away.

“What is this place?” I asked Mike, Mike turned at me.

“This is Gullon. This is the shopping capital of the underworld.” He said with a broad smile. “You can just go around, you’ll find me in the respectful “café”* poker all night.” He handed me some weird coins and then headed to his “café”.


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PostPosted: Mon Sep 29, 2008 7:10 pm    Post subject: Part 2! Then review Reply with quote

*the crowd yelling : Part 2! Part 2! Part 2!* - Then i`ll review it all. Luck!

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this week end when I have the time I'll write it. Ok?

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