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Strength
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Dreamwriter
Junior Writer

 Gender:  Age: 15 Joined: 05 Mar 2008 Posts: 49 Reviews: 20 Country: USA 300 Points
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Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 5:29 am Post subject: Strength |
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She weeps after you,
The selfish man
Who left her.
She falling down
A deep, dark pit of misery
As she yearns
For your comforting touch.
I'm stronger than her,
The sobbing woman
You left behind.
I'm standing tall and proud
As I glare
Into your spineless eyes.
She leans on me
As the support
That holds her together.
I stay strong and solid
For her sake,
And for mine.
I am stronger than her,
The woman who broke
When you left her.
My body does not give into
The tears that escape
My Heart.
I know I am stronger than her,
The woman who wants you back,
Because I kept my chin up,
And did not keen or cry
When it was I who was left by you,
You selfish, spineless man. |
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olivia1987uk
Novelist

 Gender:  Age: 21 Joined: 22 Jun 2008 Posts: 257 Reviews: 164
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Posted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 4:02 pm Post subject: |
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Love the emotion behind this! Kudos to you because I'm not usually a poetry person but the more time I spend in this forum the more I'm being converted...
I particularly like the repetition of "spineless"....its a great word that evokes such emotion.
I find your word choice brilliant and it flows really well! |
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