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Ashes to Ashes, Dust to Dust
Ashes to Ashes, Dust to Dust

by oboemagic_1414 in Action/Adventure Fiction
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 2:26 am    Post subject: Dolly Reply with quote

my mask hides my face, your mask hides the blood on your sweaty face. 

i see the blood drip out, what a worthless mask, it can not hide, all your filthy little lies.

 (your worthless, worthless)



my name, oops i don't have one, but you can just call me death.

 DEATH will come get you tonight, do you know how i know this bitch? 

I'm your killer, I'm you death.

 look real closely because this will be the last time you will ever get too see life,

 (YOUR DEATH, MY MURDER) [chant]your death, my murder. your death my murder. 

your death my murder. your death my murder, your death my murder.

 IM YOUR FUCKING KILLER.come on darling, i only wish too watch you die,

 i mean after all the bitchin shit you put me through, its the least you can do. 

(cowered) you hide in the darkest corner, hidden away from your greatest fear,

 your fear, can only be ME, oh yes me, i see your eyes they tell it all, 

the store of the once a pone a time you were just like me, but know you aren't shit Hanny.

 (MY PLASTIC DALL)

your nothing but the chemicals and wax put together. 

but your better then any Dall, your fine skin, you bright eyes, your no Dall, 

only a person filled with shit nothing really good enough too not even be spit a pone. 

the pin and needles sticking out of your skin just as bloody as your face, i know,

 i made it that way, beautiful.



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PostPosted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 11:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nize Smile

Rock song? (I'm guessing )



Rock on!!!

I liked the song because of the felling it gave me (shiver).

But you could try and put some more rime into it. I didn't find any rythym.

Otherwize it is very good =)

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LORD ANZIUS WUZ HERE AND HE HAD HIS BODYGUARD


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PostPosted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 6:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Haha. Please record this and send it to me - it's kickass.

I have to add, because I swear half of me is a perfectionist OCD freak, that there is a seperate section for lyrics.

Sorry, couldn't not say it.

But I love it!! Creepy, rocker, and kickin.

Much peace.
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