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 Posted: Wed Sep 17, 2008 12:57 am Post subject: Spark!: A Flash Contest [2] |
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This was a fun contest to host. Mostly because everyone got into the spirit of things and tried a writing style that I don't see at all here on YWS. Also, it was good for me. As a result of this contest I decided to write my own stream of consciousness piece. It's very liberating, being able to butcher grammar and get away with it. It's like claiming the insanity plea, you know?
Anyway. The results. This set of entries was not as difficult to pick and choose from, mainly because I was looking for some very particular attributes. Everyone did wonderfully, though. I could tell you all had a lot of fun.
Honorable Mention: Joyce by Alleycat13. A very strong entry. I really loved how Alleycat incorperated a secondary character, Joyce, into the whole concept of racial segregation. Also, the hat is classic. Overall, extremely well written and entertaining to read. However, I felt like this piece could have been extended a little further, as it left me wanting more than what was given.
Third Place: Hello, Jack by Jiggity. Lordy, I just can't express how much I adore the larger, more complex metaphor of a wind-up box Jiggity used here. He tied everything together neatly, quickly, and efficiently. The desciption is fantastic, the underlying themes are subtle but understandable, and above all, it made me think. This would have placed higher, but I don't think that it quite fit into my definition of stream of consciousness. It was too tranditionally written. There wasn't enough pizzazz. It wasn't disjointed enough.
Second Place: montgomery by Gadi.. This was the very definition of good stream of consciousness. Fragmented, twisted, loose, and rude. I liked how Gadi chose a different POV from everybody else, telling the story through the eyes of a white man instead of a black man. Well done, although a little too linear and erratic. Some of the objects appear out of nowhere.
First Place: Drowning. by PenguinAttack. Superb. This piece had everything - everything - I was looking for. A realistic voice, good metaphors and similes and fantastic imagery. And not to mention some spazmatastic onomatopoeia! If you haven't read this, do so. It's more or less a little piece of genius.
Thanks all! Prize requests can be PMd to me.
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In the spirit of the recent contest frenzy and because I like being a ruthless judge, I've decided to host a series of contests. Each individual Spark! will have one prompt, a single picture, and the span of a eight days to submit a story in response to photo and prompt to me.
[groovy, man]
The Prompt: Write a story using a 'stream-of-consciousness technique' and using the photograph below as inspiration. It could relate directly to the content of the picture or could vaguely mention some form of the content (within reason). And, what, you are asking yourselves, is stream-of-consciousness?
Stream-of-consciousness, to quote Wikipedia, is usually regarded as a special form of interior monologue and is characterized by associative (and at times--dissociative) leaps in syntax and punctuation that can make the prose difficult to follow, tracing a character's fragmentary thoughts and sensory feelings. In other words, you take an idea and run with it, diagraming all your thoughts and feelings and impressions. Stream-of-consciousness is often difficult to follow and sometimes winds up making the author sound like he's strung out on LSD. But it's fun. It's therapeutic. Below is an *extreme* example of stream of consciousness written by John Lennon (I think). If you submit something like this to me, you probably won't win. This snippet is just to get the gist of the process:
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sorry to say, but i'm going to have to return your ring. it's nothing personal, except that i cant do a thing with my finger & it's already beginning to smell like an eyeball! you know, like i like to look weird, but nevertheless, when i play my banjo on stage, i have to wear a glove. needless to say, it has started to affect my playing. please believe me. it has nothing whatsoever to do with my love for you ... in fact, sending the ring back should make my love for you grow all the more profound ... say hi to your doctor love, Toby Celery
do people tell you to your face you've changed? do you feel offended? are you seeking companionship? are you plump?4 ft- 5? if you fit & are a full blooded alcoholic catholic, please call UH2-6969 ask for Oompa |
Prizes:
First Place: Three of my best critiques
Second Place: Two of my best critiques
Third Place: One of my best critiques
Honorable mention: A hearty pat on the back
DISCLAIMER:
The contest will be cancelled if fewer than three people enter a tangible piece of work!
Deadline and word length:
Ends Monday September 22nd
Word length really doesn't matter to me, but since this contest is only eight days long, I would prefer fiction entries to be flash (meaning under 1,000 words).
Happy writing!
-Kylan
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| Posted: Wed Sep 17, 2008 1:26 am Post subject: |
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This is going to be a challenge but I'll think of something.
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| Posted: Wed Sep 17, 2008 2:08 am Post subject: |
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I really, really want to do this!
Just where is the photograph? |
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| Posted: Wed Sep 17, 2008 3:45 am Post subject: |
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Sorry for the technical difficulties. It should be up and running now.
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| Posted: Wed Sep 17, 2008 12:29 pm Post subject: |
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Omg OMg OMG. ^^
You're so much fun, Kylan. I'm going to have such an absolute ball writing this one. Whether or not it'll be any good, will be determined. But I'm definitely aspiring to enter this. ^^
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| Posted: Wed Sep 17, 2008 4:21 pm Post subject: |
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| I'm so in! |
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| Posted: Wed Sep 17, 2008 4:25 pm Post subject: |
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| me too! |
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| Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 2:55 am Post subject: |
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TA DA! I got one for ya. It's titled "Joyce".
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post426805.html#426805 |
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| Posted: Wed Sep 24, 2008 2:39 am Post subject: |
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Why did my post kill everything?
XD.
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| Posted: Wed Sep 24, 2008 4:54 am Post subject: |
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I know I PMed this to you, Kylan. But I've left enough time to post it, if this is easier:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post429186.html#429186
Luck all. ^^
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| Posted: Wed Sep 24, 2008 4:56 am Post subject: |
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| No, no. That's Bob Dylan. |
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| Posted: Wed Sep 24, 2008 3:00 pm Post subject: |
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Closed for judging!
(Thanks Icaruss)
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