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Lord Anzius
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 Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2008 11:31 am Post subject: Got his ass kicked in class |
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RYTHYM GOES LIKE THIS:
Ta ta ta ta titita...
so: one ta equals to one fourth note. one ti equals to one eight note. So ta ta ta ta titita ta ta ta ta titi = one fourth note, one fourth note, one fourth note, one fourth note, two eight notes and one fourth note, one fourth note, one fourth note, one fourth note, one fourth note.
Lyrics:
[Em]
[Em]
[Em]
[Em]
[Em]
Got his ass kicked in class
[D]
No one seems to care
[A7]
Why, why does no one care
[G]
'cos he's so different!
[C]
[Am]
[Em]
he's got no friends
[D]
Exept fear
[A7]
It follows him everywhere,
[G]
Even in his dreams
[Em]
Got his ass kicked in class
[D]
No one seems to care
[A7]
Why, why does no one care
[G]
'cos he's so different!
[C]
[Am]
[Em]
Sitting on an alleyway
[D]
only with his fear
[A7]
Keeping him some company,
[G]
While he cries there
[Em]
Got his ass kicked in class
[D]
No one seems to care
[A7]
Why, why does no one care
[G]
'cos he's so different!
[C]
[Am]
[Em]
He won't tell his parents
[D]
'cos he's so ashamed,
[A7]
He gets his ass kicked almost every day.
[Em]
Got his ass kicked in class
[D]
No one seems to care
[A7]
Why, why does no one care
[G]
'cos he's so different!
[C]
[Am]
[Em]
As he sat on the alleyway
[D]
a hand came out of nowhere
[A7]
Asking him to stand up
[G]
The fear stepped away
[Em]
the boy asked if he wants to be
[D]
Friends for a day
[A7]
He answerred yes
[G]
And they walked away.
[Em]
Got his ass kicked in class
[D]
but someone seems to care
[A7]
yes someone seems to care
[G]
oh yes they care
[Em]
Got his ass kicked in class
[D]
but someone seems to care
[A7]
yes someone seems to care
[G]
oh yes they care |
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| Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2008 11:52 am Post subject: |
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Nothing to point out. The rhymes are fine, the words aswell ... Its a very used idea but yours is original in the rhymes way.
Ah. The punctuation... you don't have a lot of it. Poor bloke got his ass kicked... Jesus! Such a cruel word -.-` |
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| Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2008 11:54 am Post subject: |
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that blocke was me on the first grade. BUT NOW I HAVE ALL THE POWER MUAHAHAH  |
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| Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2008 11:58 am Post subject: oh |
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Its about you? Auch... sorry about that. Great that you have the power now...  |
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