Well, this was quite different from the typical poem. The way the words were arranged kind of confused me at first. I like how you've got the underlying message though. I think when you read this poem you really need to be able to...get in depth I guess I could say. It actually isn't bad. 



I must say as well that I think the reason there's a lot of people who don't understand your poetry is that you simply have a very unique style of writing. Your works that I have read thus far have been very different and good in their own way. It's not that your poems are 'bad' in any way, but rather that they are misunderstood. 



You are, in fact, a good writer. I think it's great that you have your own style. Keep writing and I hope to see more from you.