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Impotant message for Everybody of every age
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hamerkid2
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 Posted: Sun Aug 03, 2008 6:55 pm Post subject: Impotant message for Everybody of every age |
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Finally to be heard
If everyone beleived in the same thing, could it be changed? Would you want to change it?
What if the change started in school? What if that boy who had just gotten book-dropped had someone there to help him?
The truth is the first step to change starts with one person.
Example- that boy had no one to help him. He continues his day depressed and alone. He feels that he isn't good enough. He thinks because no one cares about him, he is a failure.
Fast forward a few years. The boy is sitting in his one bedroom apartment on an old torn couch. He is thinking of middle school and how then he wanted to go to college and become a doctor. He bows his head. He then remembers high school where he sat in the corner of class hopeing that for once he could be invisible. A tear runs down the boy's cheek. He goes into his bedroom and opens the night stand. He takes out his father's old gun. He glances at his Burger King uniform, still and forever stained from the grease of the grill. He sits on the bed and grabs the nearest piece of paper. One this paper he wrote his suicide note.
He places the note on his bed, then put the gun in his mouth. It took him a few seconds to gather the courage but finally the loud bang echoes through the whole building.
In his note he said that all he wanted was one person in high school to be friends with. He wanted one of those nine girls he asked to the prom, to just say yes. But most of all he wanted to go home to a joyful place with out his father screaming at him for the bruises he had recieved form his after school beatings.
This is not a true story but it could happen.
The truth is that there is always someone who needs our help. But we are cowards who are too afraid that by helping we will damage our own reputation. But if we help, then we could change the lives of teens just like that boy. One action can change their whole day.
So what are you waiting for. You could be a hero. You could change a life.
This year when school starts up again, instead of walking by. Stop and Act.
"CHANGE A LIFE. OUR TIME IS NOW!"
-lyric from Superchick's song Hero (Red pill remix) |
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jules4848
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| Posted: Sat Aug 30, 2008 4:10 am Post subject: |
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Edited to add: Sry i didnt do any critiquing, someone pointed that out...
everything you said is correct
you might want to seperate some parts of your entry so you can read them better
you sent a good message and that is why earlier i wrote that long thing below
this is the classic story one heard many times during bullying assemblies
i like that your trying to branch out what you feel
this isnt something you can critique for errors, mainly because you are stating something
but when you were giving your example it had good flow
good work
now below is a story that happened in my school:
last year in my school we had a student that had moved to the USA from Brazil she had moved around alot but never found a school that tought her how to speak English. But my school did.
Then there was KELLY! (changed the name) She made up a group to pic on the new girl because she thought the girl was lying about how she couldn't speak english. Kelly didnt see that the new girl was actually shy and got nervous when talking to other people.
Kelly forced girls and a few boys to sign a book that made them part of a club to sabatage this girl's life. Many didn't do anything and thought nothing of it. But then Kelly and one other girl started to do things
Putting Popcorn in her locker
Making it so when she opened her locker all her books fell out
and Opening up all her binder and taking all the papers out
the new girl did not tell teachers about what was happening but my grade was starting to get nervous about what was going on. Kelly had a way of making friends by making them scared although she didnt admit it. I was once her friend when we were little but Im different because I mean we were really close we went our seperate ways but we were still friends. When middle school hit we mainly just had accasional conversations. But one of my friends got sucked in and is afraid of what might happen if she tells Kelly she doesnt want to be her friend anymore
Getting back to the main part Kelly's accomplice was one of my current friends and also she was really close to with another one of my BFFs.
Finally about a month after Kelly firrst harassed the new girl a group of about twenty student went to the guidance counselor. the night before we had all txted each other saying we were going to tell at lunch and we did. One member of the group even lied to Kelly to get the book that she kept all the sabatoging ideas in.
Half of the groups names were in the book because they had been forced to sign it originally. the teachers couldn't believe what was going on. but they did hardly anything
they moved the new girls locker to the older kids wing and made the Kelly and her accomplice write a paragraph about why bullying is bad. And Kelly complained about doing it too. We all thought she should have been suspended but she wasn't
for the rest of the year the principal and our teachers yelled at us for bullying and paided to have people come in just to teach us about the effects of bullying. alot of us thought it was pointless because it was only part of the grade that were bullies, but we were all blamed for it
Originally my grade thought we could handle Kelly on our own but when she didnt stop we sought outside help. We wished they had gotten punished more but what can you do.
We hope in the future to stop bullying especially among our grade and the younger grades. We started websites to report bullying. I personally reported the site to the teachers since they didnt know about it. The site was taken down and the school decided to create a committee so that random kids would be picked and chosen to report any bullying. Eventually that faded out too
Now the new girl has a bunch of friends, but Kelly still hates her.
Sometimes you cant handle things on your own so dont be afraid to ask for outside help.
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Sry i wrote this long thing but it was appropriate for this post and yes
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It's sad that some schools really can't afford to spend time to help smooth over in-school rivalries or stop bullying, and it's even sadder when they have a staff that just doesn't care. I'm sure most of us have been through something like this, in varying degrees. Loneliness happens, and sometimes when nobody is around to make them feel better, they take drastic actions. Sometimes they kill themselves, sometimes they kill someone else, sometimes they just become so cynical and depressed that they stay friendless wherever they go.
Most people grow out of their bullying ways, realizing how childish they are, but it's much harder to heal the kind of psychological wounds you described, Hamer.
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