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Posted: Sat Aug 16, 2008 7:15 pm Post subject:

It's a good start. The only real thing I would say is you need more detail. Sense it's from Jade's perspective you need more of her thoughts in it. What is she thinking at all times. Definitely continue though it sounds good

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