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 Posted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 3:05 am Post subject: Clo's Free Thorough Reviews |
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Okay, so I'm out of work until August so I have so much free time on my hand it hurts. Please relieve me of my pain and give me some pieces to critique!
All pieces offered up will be given the attention they deserve.
I will critique:
- Action/adventure fiction
- Fantasy fiction (I absolutely love fantasy!)
- Mild science fiction
- Other Fiction
- Romantic Fiction
- Historical Fiction
I cannot critique:
- Poetry. I'm kind inexperienced in this area...you don't want me here.
- Lyrics
- Scripts
- Fanfiction
I'll focus on anything, including grammar and style, characterization, emotion, plot flow and development... any specific requests to be paid attention to, just tell me!
In return: Nothing! Just sign my guest book, tell me something amusing. Or if you're feeling overly generous you can review something of mine. Not necessary in the slightest though. I just feel like reviewing.
Post the link here, or PM me.
Thanks bunches, muah! I hope you reward me with your stories offered up for the reviewing. 
~ Clo |
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| Posted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 10:27 pm Post subject: |
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Oooh, first response for Clo! XD
Goddess Fallen
I'd appreciate anything you can give me on this one. It's a scene I came up with that was really the starting point for a novel idea. |
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| Posted: Sun Jul 06, 2008 3:21 am Post subject: |
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Yay, first up!
Anyone else? I'm bored and ready to review to your heart's content! |
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| Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2008 5:03 am Post subject: |
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| Anyone else? These are free reviews! All you have to do is ask. ^_^ |
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| Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2008 12:59 pm Post subject: |
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if you could have a look at this one that would be good  if you have the time..which you do seem to so...
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic32572.html
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| Posted: Thu Jul 10, 2008 4:19 am Post subject: |
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Okay, I just reviewed both of your pieces! Thanks, guys!
Any other callers? ^_^ |
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| Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 5:50 am Post subject: |
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Hello? *echo... echo.... echo*
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| Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 4:45 am Post subject: |
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Ok, your done, BBB!
Still open for business. |
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| Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 2:52 pm Post subject: |
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hey clo, i don't know how to do a link yet, but it is in my portfolio under "Canaby Witches" Chapters 1-5 it is fantasy fiction and people seem to like them all so please and thankyou
---Jon--- |
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| Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 6:08 pm Post subject: |
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Okay, I have one that's short on reviews. It's either the prologue or first chapter, I'm not sure which yet, to a fantasy story. I have a problem with dialog, so if you could help me out on that it would be great. And I'll mail the cookies to you as soon as I can.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31049.html
And can I say that I love your avatar and siggie? |
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| Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 11:13 pm Post subject: |
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Okay, I reviewed the both of you guys. ^_^
Still open for requests. |
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| Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 12:32 am Post subject: |
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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33112.html
XD I agree, I love the avatar. Kitties!
Anyways, please and thank you for reviewing this. ^_^ It's for my class and I want to make it as good as possible. |
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