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The Adventures and Woes of Gregory Smit
The Adventures and Woes of Gregory Smit

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Chapter 1

"Preposterous; no man could ever devise such a wondrous contraption!" Alicia exclaimed. Earlier that morning they had been informed that a man - a man! - had invented a new machine, a brilliant new device. Such was magnitude that Queen Reilia herself wished to meet its creator. Her head lady-in-waiting however, had other ideas.

"I'm quite sure he simply pilfered the plans from some lady while her back was turned!" another woman, on the opposite side of the ornate throne, added. "I've heard he can't even write - and come on, basic literacy is a must these days in the least! It's disgraceful."

"Yes! See, Lady Roxanne understands perfectly!" Alicia nodded enthusiastically so her bun bobbed like a hen's head in excitement. Reilia was silent throughout the ordeal, ignoring her sister and her informal advisor. The two were so within the typical lady's mind frame at the time she could ask anybody here the same question and achieve an identical result. Right now, what she needed was rational thought, not those two clucking old clichés about menfolk like litanies.

"Oh do settle..." she muttered under her breath. Despite her low volume and their previous high volume, the other two seemed conditioned to do so; immediately they fell silent except for the soft bump of their rears hitting the broad arms of the throne. One for each side, their tails swished complacently. "Ah, good. Now if you would, Alicia, do inform the man's wife to come along also, of course, can't have him unsupervised. I have heard things. Oh... And let him bring a friend, too."

Outside the palace's vast front gates, two guards were conversing, and beyond them, the market sprawled. Somewhere further still, deep into the residential districts of St. Gallsbane, a mother was lamenting the birth of her son. Eighteen years past this apparent tragedy had occurred and the woman was still bitter about it. Delkan's father, true to nature, assumed his proper position: safely out of the way in the corner, being quiet. Despite having a monumental temper, Eliza Redstoke was nonetheless incapable of bringing deliberate harm to so much as an insect. Then again, nobody was meant to do harm, that, as the wise-and-all-knowing Goddess had said, was a sin, harming living things. Secondary, Delkan mused, only to being born male. Still, people committed both, though the latter was a little less avoidable.

"Eighteen and not even a suitor! Honestly Delkan, have you even been trying? I'll have you know your father was married to me when he was years younger than you!"

"Yes, Mother. Though with all due respect your mothers arranged-" he began, tentatively, but Eliza was having none of it. She strode around the plain wooden table in the centre of the room, past Michael on his stool and bustled over to his son.

"That may well be but I know how you would hate an arranged marriage just like that - I do love you, you know - I'd rather you make sure the lady likes you and would treat you right before I go asking. Far better for all of us in the long run." she rebutted, occasionally prodding him in the chest for emphasis. She was obviously trying to loom, however the young man was head and shoulders above her. Another advantage of having them married before puberty. Such a good thing men were taught not to know their own strength... Or fight back... Or... Well, Delkan never had reason to anyway. Though comparable to a lit firework Eliza was, in heart, kind. That and her husband was about as capable of inflicting harm as a lame rodent. On a stool.

"I see you understand, hmm?" she nodded after a while, looking pleased, Delkan repeated the gesture, true to what was steadily becoming a ritual.

"Yes, Mother. Though it if vexes you that much I'll marry whoever you were to choose if that would please you...?" he tried, verbally pussy-footing with the tentative steps of a cat who'd been shoved off the bed enough times for doing it to wonder if he'd gotten any chance of an anomaly yet.

"Alright, good lad..." Eliza chirped, in much better humour, and patted Delkan on the shoulder. Ah, so, anomaly indeed. Odd woman, was Eliza. "Though do make sure I don't see you with that inventor fellow until the hearing, hmm? You have a reputation as an honourable fellow we don't want that, er, spoiled now." she continued over her shoulder as she wandered off. With that she was gone, skirt skimming with finality as she rounded the doorway. A doorway that had seen many years, and even more knocks and scratches, and hadn't been of particular good quality to begin with. Delkan plonked himself down on an ancient war veteran of a chair - you had to be to survive long with Mrs. Redstoke - with more memories than he had and sighed before waving briefly at Michael in the corner.

Much as they all hated to admit it, Delkan wasn't likely to get a good marriage with his background and, on the shallower side, unremarkable looks... And certainly they weren't getting much of a choice even if they were lucky enough. This family direly needed some money... Their situation wasn't exactly brilliant and was steadily going down hill as it was. The church forbidding all sorts of things only made it worse... And then mother going and getting herself pregnant by folly with Michael again so she couldn't work for them, and men not earning much in the way of a wage to help things... He sighed heavily again. At least if the child was male he'd have a better chance at marriage than he... Bah... He wanted to go to see his friend but... Naturally, that was forbidden by Eliza until two days from now.

Chapter 2

Delkan Redstoke:

After a while I stood up and began pacing. Father watched me but said nothing; A quiet man, you see, kept to himself. I guess you could say that mutated into plain antisocial in my generation. Eventually he spoke up, warning that I was going to wear a rut in the floor, so I nodded to him in ackowledgement and off I went -Goddess knows where, I just wanted out. Well, really, I wanted to go talk to my friend, but not for two days, when he'd be telling those Royals about that new gadget. Damn... He always seemed to have new ideas; This had to be his best yet. If only. If only it were mine I could have helped my family. I really would do anything to help them - to help us, the three of us. But steal? Such a thing to steal, let alone from a friend. Could I even do it? To top it off, I knew that I shouldn't have been thinking that...

Two days later, Eliza had bullied her son into their most respectable vestments and was hustling him out the door. A little on the scruffy side, the suit was left over from their better days and hence would have to do. St. Gallsbane was the city that housed the palace; it was well within walking distance from this district of the capital. On his way out he shrugged on a thick, brown wool overcoat to defend against the cold despite his mother's protests. It completely swamped him and his passably neat beige suit. In fact all that poked out was his faded tan thigh boots. They disappeared under the hem of his jacket, the beast of a garment was just that long. Long, thick, warm, and not something you wore if you wanted to look decent, but there was no use in looking tidy if you were a suspiciously human shaped icicle in a back alley somewhere. He barely noticed that Eliza was still going on at him, absently clicking the door closed to silence her, at least to his ears. Then he strode off down the snow swathed street with his hands lodged in his cavernous pockets.

St. Gallsbane was right in the heart of the frigid lands of Veldijk. Almost perpetually covered in frost, going outside in less than three layers, people said, was a health hazard. The only time the sun seemed to bother shining was dead in the midst of Firebreath; so named because the season was like an exhalation of warmth over the land's icy skin. That, and the legend went that the Goddess had fought with a great fire breathing monster. She won of course, but she was so taken with the beast's efforts she let him devour the omnipresent clouds and lounge in the sun's glory once a year. Then came Bloodfall, for the bleeding to death of the annual falling leaves. After that, Inkheight, darkest and coldest of the seasons; when the Goddess mood was as black as the sky. Every year, priestesses prayed for her to lighten her spirits, and it all went back to that patch of warmth: Drakesbirth, for the rising of that dragon's heat. Nobody really knew if the dragon existed or if it was a story the Goddess planted. She worked in mysterious ways, after all, and any priestess claiming to be her voice was usually locked safely out of the way somewhere. Really, they weren't terribly imaginative peoples in their naming. Even the name for their continent simply meant 'world' in some obscure language, which was rather egotistical since there were myriad other island and continents. Godforsaken as they were, at least they weren't frozen wastelands. Whatever the reason, the crystalline North was watched by the Goddess through all its insane happenings.

In the middle housing section of the glacial capital, snow laded houses arched up on either side of Delkan Redstoke as he strode along. Every building had white nestling in its gutters like plump ptarmigans. Their style was dark wooded, squat of structure; most were bungalows. Frost gathered on latticed decorative wood, criss-crossing the fronts of the houses. Most of them had bricks painted black - at the very least dark brown. Delkan picked his way over slick doorsteps and around vagrants huddling for what little warmth there was to be had. He was too close to their situation to have in the way of pity. After a while he escaped out of the haphazard muddle that was the residential district and into the sprawling monster of the market. Merchants jogged on the balls of their feet, swathed in rich dyed wools or shabby furs according to prosperity. A wind was picking up and billowing the sides of the tents. This did not bode well. Seeing this, Delkan ducked his head and yanked his heavy hood up before tugging his hands out of his sleeves. He then huddled over inside this makeshift cloak as he made his way, ignoring the beckons and shouts of the desperate salesmen all around. No time to wait, to stall, to hesitate, he was going to be late as it was.

((Notes: Any comments on appropriate palces for indentation would be extremely helpful. I'm having a bit of a bother with that currently. :3 I hope you enjoy it, it picks up soon. There are trains with sails, too! You'll see.))


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PostPosted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 4:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I have to say, I do like the empowerment of the women and the putting of men in their places. *evil feminist laugh* Nah, just kidding. I'm all about equal treatment and all that jazz.

Anyway, this seemed like an interesting world that you put a lot of thought into. I must say, more than the characters or the story so far, it has been the world that has grabbed my attention. And while that is great, you might want to put an effort into making the characters hooks for the reader. As is, I really can't say as I care for any of them: they're either bossy women or submissive men. And whoever it was with those thoughts about how unfair life is, I really didn't even know who that was, much less cared about them. You write well, it's just that all the great writing in the world won't help if there isn't a character or story we can latch onto. Perhaps there will be a magnificent character waiting to be revealed and adored by the masses and they just haven't come out yet. I'd get to that reeeeal soon.

I think it would be best to limit your posts to one chapter each and then number the posts according to chapters. It keeps the post length down (it is daunting to read long posts on the computer) and keeps the post down to one topic. Makes for greater readability on a screen, it does.

All the ellipses were a little distracting. I understand their charm (they are my favorite form of punctuation) but too much of them leaves the reader pulling their hair out by the roots in how the character never finishes one thought before moving on to another. I'd keep the ellipses down to a bare minimum. Too many and the reader gets jaded to them and they lose their effectiveness.

And that one paragraph of first person POV: I was really confused as to who was supposed to be speaking there and why it was there at all. It was a strange jump from the third person narration of the rest of the piece and it seemed more like personal thoughts. If it is supposed to be one character's thoughts, you could put it in italics and then have somewhere where you specifically say who it is thinking those thoughts. As is, it was a bit confusing.

But anyway, this was a great piece of work. Like I said, I was sucked into the world so far and your writing is great. A bit more emphasis on characters, methinks, and all will be well.

*thumbs up* Welcome to YWS!

~GryphonFledgling

P.S. Your poll only goes up to four stars, when you said 'scale of one to five'. Wink And the poll really isn't necessary - people's reviews will tell you more about how much they liked the story without having to check the box. Smile

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 5:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh, thankyou! I did think about that third person thing, I was getting around to labelling it as Delkan. *Cough*

And yes, all the charries at the moment are 2D. They're develop as it goes along. The character in the upcoming chapters brings Delkan's ACTUAL personality out, and it quite the... Er... Fellow. I'll definitely bear that characterisation thing in mind for later, right now I'm setting the scene and whatnot, and I have a habit of sort of... Drowning in that and forgetting the characters themselves.

About the ellipsises... A vice. I shall bear that in mind. ^^

If you're interested in reading further, the next chapter, or at least the very beginning of the one after it, has Kraymer in it. Delkan is my 'blank slate' character and he develops as it goes along. :3

Thankyou for your critique, all things I need to bear in mind when i go back and fiddle. ^.^'

*Goes and edits the first person paragraph as per instruction* 'XD

Edit: Argh the poll will have to stay. ;_;
Also, fixed some of the punctuation. Better at all? ^^

Another edit: Don't think I'm sexist. I just fancied turing everything up on its head.

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Chapter 3

His first sight of the palace was through flakes of snow. An occasional spot of white drifted down to blow away on Delkan's misted breath. Daring a glance upwards at the myriad spires and battlements that made it look more like a castle, he picked up his pace to beat the inevitable blizzard. Behind him all the merchants were hurriedly packing away, stuffing goods in packs and satchels. The better off then had these loaded into carriages drawn by stocky horses swamped in thick, shaggy fur. The rest simply hauled or humped their produce back to where they came from.
By now, Delkan has reached the palace bridge. He handed the parchment allowing him passage to one of the guards - a woman with fiery ginger hair bursting from the back of her helmeted head. After checking the seal for false Writing, she nodded and waved him inside as the paper harmless smouldered to ash in her other hand. Reilia had something of a penchant for fire Written admission papers. That tended to frighten newcomers especially, or those unaware of the magic. Of course, you had to be living firmly lodged under a rock not to at least have some idea what Writing was, or how it worked. Anybody with a Quill garnered great respect, the only ones capable of commanding the strange power of Writing.
Before Delkan could make an attempt to scarper inside, the second guard manhandled a spare gatekeeper into escorting Delkan to the hearing room.
"Goddess' Quill woman! Get to it!" she barked. The gatekeeper stammered an apology and did was she was told. So startled - and disgruntled- was she that she said nothing but 'this way' or 'that way' for the entire journey. Occasionally a platoon of guardswomen would stomp past. Some kept rigid formation, outgoing, others ambled by with their helmets tucked under their arms ready for a wash and a rest. All of them had leather armour fortified with iron plates in places, too heavy and cumbersome to cover the entire body. Shoulder and breast plates, arm plates and gauntlets, chain mail to protect the thigh. The leather was a rich brown and the iron pristine, except for the occasional dent - a sign of a loyal warrioress, in fact. Those wearing their helmets looked fearsome; the metal covered their noses, arched over their eyes, with curling designs etched in like flowing handwriting. The captains had sprays of feathers like bird crests, all different shimmering colours. Most had dropped hair, though some had their flowing locks pouring out from under their helmets, unbound. Hardened, competent warriors, every one of them; they looked ready for war; something that hadn't happened in generations. According to the government and the general awe of surrounding countries, that was happening any time soon either. Nonetheless, only the best women were allowed into the Army or the palace guard.

A short while of weaving through the tastefully decorated hallways (and skirting around platoons) later, the gatekeeper left Delkan in the waiting room and scampered away. As per instructions, he sat down, and less by instruction, looked around. The walls were standard limestone from the nearby quarry on the Eleyr coastline, with the occasional rich tapestry or thick-set table. Over all, very much like an open version of the hallways, except instead of the simple extended crimson rug, an enormous, worn carpet sat devouring the bleak greyness of the floor. Wood struts lined all the walls here, something much like mahogany. Delkan was interrupted in his admiration by a slight lady in a quaint dress inviting him into the hearing room.
"Hello there, would you like to come in now, Mr. Redstoke?" she chirped. Of course that was just courtesy. What she really meant was that he was coming now, like it or not.

Delkan Redstoke:

"Yes ma'am." I mumbled and stood. My lovely warm coat was uselessly hanging up on a rack somewhere, where, I didn't know. I sighed and followed the dark haired woman. Since I had nothing else to look at, and I did rather need to see where she was leaded me, I watched her as she led me. Her tail was quite sweet, a downy, short and thin little thing - a little like an azure kitten tail. Much nicer than my drag beige reptillian tail. Too long for me, bloody thing, I was always tripping on it at awkward moments. The spines along the top are rather fetching but otherwise it's just a nuisance. Hers bobbed back and forth cutely from under her knee length skirt and mine just swished blindly as I walked, ungainly and useless. I can't help thrashing it when I'm nervous you see, the main problem being that I am, I hate to admit, usually nervous. A little while of self-depreciation later, she gestured for me to stop. Right next to Kraymer.

((Bonus: Krayer's full name is Kraymer van Dreig. He's this world's equivalent of Spanish, because I said so.))

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Chapter 4

The man slid his unnervingly black eyes across in a sort of makeshift greeting and raised an eyebrow. Well, he could have been raising both but he wasn't looking at me so I couldn't exactly tell. Queen Reilia was on her throne up there, flanked by Lady Roxanne and that cutie with the blue tail. The Queen was just as awe inspiring as everyone said - Runes at each temple, bolted to a metal headband with a magnificent crest of owl feather arching back. Her hair - the colour of dusty soil - was so long it pooled on her seat in ripples. She was looking at Kraymer and me; I noticed her eyes were a piercing royal blue, and a little less slitted than most of us had. Her tail was long, thin, a whip the same hue of pink as the flush of a baby's cheeks... Never mind me, I get carried away sometimes. Its tip swished casually by her side as she addressed us with that rich, smooth voice she was famous for.
"Welcome, Delkan Redstoke. Welcome, Kraymer van Dreig. I appreciate your coming." she nodded to each of us in turn as she went through the traditional formality. I couldn't help widening my eyes in awe at the way her crest dipped with the movement. Once she was done, she flattened her dress over her lap and spoke to Kraymer directly.
"Now, if you would, please explain how this contraption works?" she asked with a cocked a brow.
"Yes ma'am." my friend smirked slightly, bowed, and as he brought his hands in, tugged something from his jacket pocket with a flourish I knew all too well.

Queen Reilia:

Interesting, very interesting. The device this Kraymer has produced so flamboyantly was indeed quite intriguing. It was about the length of his outstretched hand, I could tell, as he held it in the manner of a long insect from the tip of his middle finger to his wrist lengthwise. It was thing, perhaps the diameter of two of his fingers. For a man I noticed they were slim through the black leather of his gloves, which meant the... Machine... Was quite slim line indeed. A very peculiar piece of machinery, over all, I had never seen the like. About halfway down there was a neat indent, around which was Writing. And inside the hollow, too, how could this man have had it Written upon? Writing on objects was a tedious business, after all, and incredibly difficult to get it to work without backfiring through some form of loophole. Remarkable, I would have to find the Priestess who performed such a task and reward her - if this thing worked. I only had a vague idea how, however.
The contraption itself was copper, and have seven arms, three each side and a seventh mounted at the front with a three-clawed grasper. Beastly looking thing, come to think of it. It suddenly came to my attention that I had been staring, and Kraymer was evidently waiting for the go ahead. Coughing, I informed him that he was to proceed.
"Yes, Your Majesty." he repeated, then glanced round. "This machine may only be a small prototype but I can still show you its secondary purpose, the first would need more preparation. If you would, I'd like something to... Imbue? Let's call it that, actually. Anything at all, Your Majesty." he began. I tapped Alicia's shoulder without turning round and instructed her to go fetch a pebble from the potted plant in the corner.
"Yes... That one should do." I managed to look round at my lady-in-waiting when she called. Frankly, I didn't want this peculiar fellow freaking anything valuable. Alicia trotted over to him - such a gay creature when she wasn't squabbling - and deposited it in his free hand before returning to my side. Delkan just kept glance at Kraymer from the corner of his vision like I couldn't, or shouldn't, see him doing it. Odd fellow. He ended up turning around to look at him fully when he saw what his friend was doing. In fact, so did I, and this time I was too startled to care that I was staring again.

Kraymer had placed the machine on the rock. That in itself wasn't so exceptional, it was the fact that he had produced of an entirely different kind of stone from his pocket: A sharp piece of obsidian with a strange red symbol carved into it polished flat face. Writing crawled on its surface lazily, a dim amber. How had this man come into a possession of a fire Rune? He wasn't somebody Reilia had heard of... Only the most important women were allowed such Runes, and his wife wasn't one of those as far as she was aware. Regardless of how he had acquired it, he clicked the rock into the indent on the gadget and then he placed this on the larger pebble. Quick as a flash, it latched on - Roxanne shuddered at how insectoid it seemed - and dug its front claw in to the stone. The leg went straight through with nought but a pinprick of light. Delkan stepped backwards from surprise; Kraymer just smirked. The Writing on the Rune began pouring down the brass arm and radiating out across its surface. Suddenly excited and alive, the words spilled across the entire surface of the rock for several seconds, then Kraymer casually plucked the claw from the stone's core. The Writing ceased its spasmodic scurrying almost immediately and settled. Next, Kraymer removed the rune from the indentation. Not a scratch, all that remained to show what happened was a tiny, glowing red pin-point the colour of the Rune's symbol.

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 8:45 am    Post subject: Ch. 1/2 Reply with quote

It's an interesting concept, women overturning the tables and taking over the government etc. etc.

I think it could be applied better in the story, however. The story begins very quickly. I think it should

be more strung out. There was a lot of information in the first paragraph, maybe even too much. You

should think about seriously varying the amount of story information in each paragraph. Perhaps an

initial burst of info. in the first sentence and then a continuation/explanation of that in the second

(sentence). Very Happy Otherwise, it's a fascinating beginning to a new type of story. Very Happy

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 8:48 am    Post subject: Spacing!!!!!! Reply with quote

I forgot to mention it in the review, but spacing is a big problem. You can't review a story if it's too

hard to read.

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