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Drawing Near
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 Gender:  Age: 17 Joined: 03 May 2005 Posts: 83 Reviews: 22 Country: st.paul,MN 300 Points
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Posted: Thu Jun 09, 2005 6:30 pm Post subject: Drawing Near |
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The sun comes out
The darkness fades
For I have been covered with shades
The darkness nears
Bringing all the fears
Blinding veiws from your tears.
Sun shineing shineing bright
But I still can not take flight
Because of all the fright
But I can not fight
the fear.
The darkness of the night surrounds
The ghosts start to give their frowns
Now intwined and bound
To the fears all around
But glimmering light now just found
starting to surround.
Sun shineing shineing bright
But I still can not take flight
Because of all the fright
But I can not fight
the fear. |
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Elizabeth
1 Piece To The Original YWS Couple Epic Novelist

 Gender:  Age: 17 Joined: 07 Dec 2004 Posts: 3023 Reviews: 1160 Country: If I told you I would have to kill you 300 Points
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Posted: Sat Jun 11, 2005 4:00 am Post subject: |
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You spelled shining and I think INTWINED wrong but honestly other than that. I'm pretty sure I see nothing else wrong. Nice line breaks. And It is a song, if you want I can come up with a tune for it It's a boring hobby only I probably enjoy. Anyway, this was a nice song. Make another one Piano man...  |
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Posted: Mon Jun 13, 2005 6:29 pm Post subject: |
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| Shure Liz make a tune. |
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Posted: Sun Nov 27, 2005 8:24 am Post subject: sex |
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Elizabeth
1 Piece To The Original YWS Couple Epic Novelist

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Posted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 9:53 pm Post subject: |
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| Well that is the weirdest post I have ever read! |
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