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OnCeUpOnAtIm3Xo
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 Posted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 1:01 am Post subject: Critiques all around! |
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Okay, so I'm very, very thourough when I edit and I do not miss a thing that needs to be fixed. Which means that, yes, I will shred your story to pieces only to have it come out amazing!  Please post your story only if you can handle me ripping it to shreds!
What I Critique:
-Fantasy Fiction
-Action/Adventure Fiction
-Science fiction
-Scripts
-Advanced critiques (but only if you sign my guestbook )
-Historical Fiction
-Romantic Fiction
-Art & Photography
-Lyrics (I'll give it a shot)
What I don't Critique:
-Any horror or gruesome stories
-Poetry
-Fan fiction (unless it's Harry Potter or Twilight - if it is I'll give it a shot)
-Non-fiction
What I focus on (in no particular order of strengths) :
-How realistic a work is
-Spelling/Punctuation/Grammar
-Character Development
-Flow
-Description
-Dialogue
-Emotion/Mood
-Setting
-Imagery
-Word choice/run-on sentences
-Info dumping
How many stories I'll critique:
As many as you want me to
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OnCeUpOnAtIm3Xo
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LoveableLittleSock
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| Posted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 8:40 pm Post subject: |
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Hey! Wow, you really want some business, huh?
I'm happy to comply! =) Would you mine critiquing this? And be incredibly harsh to the point where my protaganist is on her knees, sobbing her eyes out? Anything along those lines?
This is a contest entry for the contest JFW1415 is holding, and I want it to, well, sort of win. It probably won't, looking at the other entries, but I want to try my best. The ending is really cliche, because it involves vampires, and that's just about what every story has in it these days.. but, besides that, note everything else.
Thanks so much! Here's the link!
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31662.html |
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XxxDo
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| Posted: Thu Jun 19, 2008 8:15 pm Post subject: - |
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Heya
It would be cool if you could take a look at one of my stories. I don't know how to link... I forgot  so I'll just say the name. The Ultimatum, in Adventure/Action. It went really unnoticed, and no one has reviewed it so far, so I'd really appreciate it if you did!
Do you have something you want critiqued? I haven't been critiquing enough lately either haha
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| Posted: Fri Jun 20, 2008 2:27 am Post subject: |
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| Hey! If you could look at my "The Duty" chapters, that would be awesome. You can do any of them I don't really care I just want feedback! |
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| Posted: Wed Jun 25, 2008 11:45 pm Post subject: |
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Hey, um, I'm kind of new here, I guess. My first post got sort of unclear and relatively unhelpful reviews. I forget how to post completely, so the title's Chapter 1 (Maybe)
the maybe part's actually in the title. and it's in action/ adventure fiction.
Please critique if you have the time.
I really appreciate it!
PM me sometime!
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. Itis in fantasy fiction, or just go to my portfolio. I'd put a link, but I have no idea how to do it 
