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Critter seeking something to procrastinate with.

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 6:58 pm    Post subject: Critter seeking something to procrastinate with. Reply with quote
I will do my best to crit anything given to me!

Can do list:
Grammar
Plots
Dialogue
General flow of the piece
Atmosphere
Brutal honesty

In return, can I *pretty* please have reviews/crits on these two things [mainly the second]:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30694.html
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31199.html

Thanks, muchily.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 9:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
I got a three-part story called Tangled Up In Blue.

1: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post382487.html
2: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31268.html
3: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31373.html

I will gladly review both of your pieces. Thank you!

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PostPosted: Sun Jun 15, 2008 3:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Tangled Up In Blue, done!

Who's next?

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PostPosted: Sun Jun 15, 2008 5:03 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
MEMEME!

it's HSM\AATC FF so be aware.

here is chapter 1: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31592.html

now 2: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31611.html

thanks,
MATT

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PostPosted: Sun Jun 15, 2008 7:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
^ That one done Smile

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 11:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
new chapter: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post383145.html#383145
it may be a bit strong at the end.
thanks!
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PostPosted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 5:18 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
^Done Smile

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 9:05 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Critique this? It's my contest entry for JFW's contest. Don't mind the cliche ending with vampires - I was too uncreative to think of anything else. And, you know, if you do a line by line, I have cookies and some points waiting for you.

Here's the link!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31662.html

Thanks so much!

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 9:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
and here is chapter 4 (a wee bit better then the last: READ IT) http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31692.html
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