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The White Man's Burden (2008 Version)
The White Man's Burden (2008 Version)

by Jaden G. in Lyric Poetry
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 03, 2008 7:28 pm    Post subject: Keep it Cool - Chapter 4 Reply with quote

I decided to continue the story, so here it is. Chapter 4, following Chad and his buddies to a party of younger kids. I won't ruin anything else. This is rated PG13 for strong alcohol references, and minor language:

EDIT: Wow, no downloads yet. I guess that puts me in my place.

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PostPosted: Sun Jul 20, 2008 9:03 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I've picked up from where I've left off, and thought I'd give Keep it Cool one more try. This is for anyone who's interested in reading it anyways. It's a nice counterpart to A Foggy Glass, which is supposed to be a darker tale...

Chapter five...

This one explores Rachel a bit more, while Chad finds himself drawn to her even more than previously. Also, the party is ended unexpectedly...

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