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Twilight Fanfiction: The Wedding

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PostPosted: Mon May 26, 2008 1:26 am    Post subject: Twilight Fanfiction: The Wedding Reply with quote

Edward fidgeted at the altar. Why does Bella have to be so sacrificial?, he thought. Oh, well. I guess that's just part of why I love her. He smiled to himself.

Just then, Bella entered the cathedral hall. She was dressed in a silky, flowing, white gown, as opposed to the one Alice had chosen (Bella had told Alice to save that one for Jasper and her marriage.) Bella's hair was curled and clipped back to fall in a line down the center of her back. The style was held in place by a beautiful diamond tiara.

Alice, Rosalie, and Angela carried the hem of her dress, while Charlie linked his arm into hers. She walked down the aisle, unthinkably graceful, given her typical clumsiness. Edward only had eyes for her.

Edward took her hand and gazed into her deep brown eyes.

"You look beautiful."

Bella smiled. "I could say the same about you."

Edward chuckled quietly.

He only half-listened to the priest. He was occupied with listening to the audience's thoughts.

Alice, standing on the wing of the altar, was looking at Jasper. Thinking about his face.

Oh boy.

Emmett was admiring the buff angels carved onto the cathedral walls. They almost look real.

Edward could feel Rosalie's eyes on the back of his head.

You'd better not, she thought at him. Edward Cullen, you cannot put that girl through what we have to go through.

Edward tuned her out.

Jacob Black was sitting in the back row. Bella, he thought. Bella, don't do this. You can't leave me, Bella. You love me. We love each other and you know it. Remember the kiss? That wonderful kiss? Bella! No!

"I do." Bella looked at Edward and squeezed his hand, smiling nervously.

While the priest spoke, thoughts ran through Edward's head. Other people's thoughts.

Charlie: That's my baby girl! Renee: My beautiful daughter, marrying young, just like me. This will hurt her. I swear it will. Angela: Bella and Edward. Bella Cullen. Catchy.

"Do you, Edward Cullen...."

Edward tuned out all the voices. This was his and Bella's moment.

"I do."

Bella was crying. Hiccuping, too. In happiness.

"You may now kiss the bride."

Edward embraced Bella, and they kissed.

There was a thundering pound of footsteps and a slamming door as Jacob Black sprinted out of the cathedral.

"Bella Cullen," Edward whispered when they broke apart.

Bella smiled. Pure joy shone from her face.

"Bella Cullen."


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PostPosted: Mon May 26, 2008 2:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

CUTE! I love Twilight. I love how Alice and Jasper's thoughts were. It's so sad about jacob though, I really would pick him over Edward.

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PostPosted: Mon May 26, 2008 6:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

LOVE IT! I think it was perfect. You should have included the rest of the Cullens like Edward's parents. But I really like it, good job.

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PostPosted: Mon May 26, 2008 6:32 pm    Post subject: Re: Twilight Fanfiction: The Wedding Reply with quote

LilyReagan wrote:
You'd better not, she thought at him. Edward Cullen, you cannot put that girl through what we have to go through.


Was she tlking about turning Bella? Stephenie better turn her or I will be VERY mad. --- Sorry I didn't post this in the last one.

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PostPosted: Tue May 27, 2008 11:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very good! I always wanted Bella to end up with Jacob though.
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PostPosted: Thu May 29, 2008 12:33 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Absolutely, postitively LOVED IT!!!!!! Bravo.

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PostPosted: Thu May 29, 2008 6:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wouldn't Bella have felt at least a little sympathy or guilt about Jacob. And why would he come? Wouldn't he have intervened? I mean come on, you know he would have.

Over all it's okay, but I have to say I hope Stephanie Meyer gets this on the dot and better. Sorry I just hope for it. It needs to be ten times better. If not she'll be hanging by a thread in my book. Well it was okay. I'd have to say make it longer. It would seam like eternity to listen to the priest drone on as I am now. Razz Anyways, good job... I think. I have no idea anymore.

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PostPosted: Thu May 29, 2008 6:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Cute, but I gotta be honest... I didn't feel like that was really Edward. Some of the things he was saying just didn't seem like things he would say.

And ambercoultis is right - wouldn't Bella feel somewhat bad about Jacob?

But anyway, it's cute. I wish Stephenie would have included the wedding in the third book..

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PostPosted: Thu May 29, 2008 8:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

ambercoultis, I just wanted to say that Jacob said in Eclipse that he wouldn't intervene if Edward was the one Bella chose. I wrote this before I read the first chapter of Breaking Dawn, so I didn't know about Jacob going to Canada. Oh, and KJ, I'm sorry it didn't sound like Edward--I'm no Stephenie Meyer!! Very Happy Bella would have felt bad inside (like she was being torn in two, probably), but since it's written in Edward's POV, I couldn't show that.... Sorry, I just felt obligated to explain.

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PostPosted: Sat May 31, 2008 3:58 am    Post subject: I liked it! Reply with quote

I liked how you included the other characters' thoughts in there, instead of just focusing on edward and bella.
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PostPosted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 3:55 am    Post subject: Re: Twilight Fanfiction: The Wedding Reply with quote

This was a cute story, but I've got to agree with KJ...this didn't really feel like Edward's point of view. But, you know what they say...practice makes perfect. Also, I think you could have been a little more descriptive.
But, like I said, it was a cute story (I'm a sucker for anything Edward/Bella Very Happy ). Keep writing!
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 10, 2008 1:08 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

beautiful writing but it could have been more personal. I dont feel like you got their personalities across completly. But it was a good fanfic all in all. Keep writing!
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 29, 2008 9:25 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Lol, I sound obbsessive, but I sorta am about Jasper and Alice.

In one of the books, probably Twilight, it was said that Jasper and Alice were married. So it's not possible for her to save the dress.

But it was also said that Emmett and Rose like to have another wedding everytime they move.
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