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Esmé
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 Posted: Fri May 23, 2008 7:20 pm Post subject: Critiques like blades, cutting up (yeah, yeah) your story! |
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To Whom It May Concern,
Since everyone else did this already, Esme though she’d do it, too. And since she very much enjoys ripping others’ work into shreds, and finding mistakes that, if they were in her own, she’d not… indeed, why not? Certainly not because that ability goes poof! when it comes to her own work, no… But never you mind! It’s me whose supposed to be nosy! Not trying your hand at usurpation, are you?
*glares.
But, a list! A list of what Esme critiques! Well, a hint: You’ll see her lurking around the Fiction forums, never, ever in the Poetry ones, though she tends to avoid (read: runs away screaming) non-fiction and lyrics, and science fiction (if back to Fantasy). Photography? Photography, you ask?
She’ll say it’s pretty.
Anyway. Ekhem. Post what you want critiqued here, and most probably you’ll get a line-by-line one, followed by any impressions, likes and disliked Esme might have.
Cheers! Felicitation! Regards! Yours faithfully! |
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| Posted: Fri May 23, 2008 9:28 pm Post subject: |
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Hey! I've seen your awesomeness critiques and I've always wanted one! sorry, I can't provide a link, but it's called Run, Fat Boy, Run! Day 1. It's short, and it's the first day of my new story.
Please and thank you!
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| Posted: Sat May 24, 2008 2:56 pm Post subject: |
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Alainna - I was in the middle of your critiques, actually ^^ Anyway, done.
BigBadBear - yours should come soon.
Cheers,
Esme
Update: BigBadBear, the first part was critted.
Update once more: Yours is done, too, Rei. |
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| Posted: Sat May 24, 2008 3:23 pm Post subject: |
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I would love to have my present novel be torn to shreds. It's a format that I'm trying for the first time and have no idea what I'm doing. Here's the linkie to the first part:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic27836.html |
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| Posted: Sun May 25, 2008 6:49 pm Post subject: |
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Hey! I'm working on a new short story, and this is the first part of Abductions. I would love you to rip it apart!
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| Posted: Mon May 26, 2008 6:15 pm Post subject: |
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Sythe,
Yours is done ^^ I did forget to state that I rarely do sci-fi, but since you already asked I did it. The question is, was it any good? Eh. |
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| Posted: Mon May 26, 2008 6:30 pm Post subject: |
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Part One
Part Two
Please? I'm in love with your critiques.
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| Posted: Tue May 27, 2008 10:26 am Post subject: |
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 Have you always been purple? If not, congrats! If so...blame it on the freaky Tuesday that feel like a Friday! 
Part One
Part Two
Part Three
You know you love me. 
Anyways, that's (maybe?) the last for a while. I'm just in love with your critiques! You helped so much - I'm looking forward to revising.
If you don't want to do more from me, or if you just want to do me last, that's fine.
Thanks!
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| Posted: Sat May 31, 2008 5:30 pm Post subject: |
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| After a fashion, but everything finished |
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| Posted: Sat May 31, 2008 6:42 pm Post subject: |
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The Lunar Cast
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| Everything finished ^_^ |
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