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 Posted: Thu May 26, 2005 5:04 pm Post subject: Flat Cliche |
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Tired of being pushed around
Tired of the flat notes in my sound
Tired of taking all their sh*t
Tired of pieces refusing to fit
Tired of holding back my weird thoughts
Tired of being what I'm not
Tired of getting pushed away
Tired of the same old over-done cliche
Why can't you just hear me out?
Chorus:
I wanna be
What everybody thinks I'm not
Jealousy
I'm not popular or hot
Normality
Is anything but myself
Stupidity
I never left it on my shelf
No
Never left it on my shelf
Tired of running from photographs
Tired of being scared to kick some ass
Tired of being so insecure
Tired of feeling like a god-damn bore
Tired of people up in my grill
Tired of getting told to chill
Tired of being the quiet one
Tired of missing all the fun
Everybody listen up
Chorus
Tired of getting shoved around
Tired of never standing my ground
Tired of folks all in my face
Tired of keeping this steady pace
Tired of being so damn good
Tired of being misunderstood
Tired of being another girl
Tired of my crazy world
Stop right there I wasn't done
Chorus
Bridge:
Trying to write
Trying to sing
Wanna speak my mind
Need to fit
Avoid misfit
I'm not that kind
Everybody, everywhere
Chorus
No No No
No more tiresome cliches
No No No
It's time, time to change my ways
No No No
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| Posted: Thu May 26, 2005 5:51 pm Post subject: |
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| I LOVE THIS!!! I can so relate to this song and thats one of the most inportent things in song writting I think. And it also had great flow and it was just overall great! good job Harley! |
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Harley
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| Posted: Thu May 26, 2005 5:54 pm Post subject: |
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| wow- thanks so much! |
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| Posted: Thu May 26, 2005 6:02 pm Post subject: |
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Its good!! Damn you.. I wish you could sing it for me!! |
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| Posted: Thu May 26, 2005 6:13 pm Post subject: |
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| Yeah. Sounds great. I could really imagine this being set to music. I wasn't too fond of how many lines started with "Tired of". It would probably have the same effect and be understood the same way. Though it might muck up the rhythm. Try it like that and see which one sounds better to the music you imagined. |
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| Posted: Thu May 26, 2005 6:22 pm Post subject: |
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| i like it! alot! it was great-and that's putting it bluntly-is it like a greenday type song? you should like sooooo send it too them! |
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| Posted: Thu May 26, 2005 6:42 pm Post subject: MAZIN |
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ur song is pure mad raginly good  |
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Harley
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| Posted: Thu May 26, 2005 6:50 pm Post subject: |
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The point of the song was that the lines started off as "Tired of"- they're the verses. not many songs are like that, but it's meant to be that way.
Thanks for all the comments, you guys!! (thanks ross xxxxx) i worked sooo hard on this one- i typed it up on yws, but had to go out, so i copied it and shut the post box, and i tried to paste it into word, but it wouldn't paste! sp i had to quickly type out everything that i couldn't remember (with like a million typos) and take it in the car and write it alkl down again, but hey, it's worked out pretty cool, so yay! |
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| Posted: Fri May 27, 2005 3:18 pm Post subject: |
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| I liked it. I don't know why, but I liked the last two lines, (the contradictory no's and yeah). I know, I'm weird. Anyway, I like this because it feels really personal and intense. Good song. |
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| Posted: Fri May 27, 2005 3:27 pm Post subject: |
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That bit is a contribution to the randomness of me 
I'm thinking of redrafting the chorus to:
I wanna be
What everybody thinks I'm not
Jealousy
I'm not popular or hot
Humanity
Is leaving be all by myself
Stupidity
I never left it on my shelf
No
Never left it on the shelf |
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