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Kisses in the Rain, Sunsets on the Water
Kisses in the Rain, Sunsets on the Water
by guitargrl1323 in Lyric Poetry
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This thread was created on May 26, 2005
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PostPosted: Thu May 26, 2005 9:33 am    Post subject: Realm Reply with quote
I need someone to write a song about
a perfect life
I need someone to write a song about
a perfect love
Why is everything so incomplete?
Tell me it's a different way
When I get to sleep

Chorus:
Dreams come
When you need to wake up
From another world
Where everything you see
ANd everything you feel
won't be cold

I need someone to write a song about
a life that fails
I need someone to write a song about
a love that's never happy
I'm always hiding somewhere
A place where i can sleep
And forget everything

.......
Where did everybody go?
I'm finding you
I'm always finding you....

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PostPosted: Thu May 26, 2005 3:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
I like this and can't wait for the rest of the song.

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PostPosted: Thu May 26, 2005 3:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Nice Smile.

One prob: line five in the chorus has 'ANd' where it should just be 'And' Wink.

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PostPosted: Thu May 26, 2005 5:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Cool- i like the firt four lines in each verse; sounds like it's about trying to find inspiration for songs. lol- it's really hard, i have a song like this in my notepad- all about how my life is so boring i can't think of anything to write... true story- my life is a snorefest.

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PostPosted: Fri May 27, 2005 1:13 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
thanks, guys! Smile

Can't wait to make my next song.....

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