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| Posted: Fri Apr 25, 2008 8:56 pm Post subject: |
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Oooh, big eye!
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Quite clear as it is, but if you sharpened the focus on the lashes, it might look better. |
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| Posted: Fri Apr 25, 2008 10:53 pm Post subject: |
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| I liked the closed eye better than the open one. Somehow it was more powerful. The "See All Evil" one was a bit blurry. |
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| Posted: Fri Apr 25, 2008 11:11 pm Post subject: |
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I like the closed eye better, actually. It's so pale and peaceful looking. XD
When I saw the other one (before you put up the "See No Evil" one) I jumped back about two feet, it was so big and startling:) |
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| Posted: Sun Apr 27, 2008 3:32 am Post subject: |
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The first one looks kinda like wax, which is pretty cool.
I agree with TL G-Wooster, you should sharpen up the eyelashes.
Maybe the eyebrows as well. |
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| Posted: Tue May 13, 2008 4:30 am Post subject: |
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This is really cool! I love how you captured the concept of "See no evil" "See Evil"! It's so good! I agree though, make the eyelashes darker. It will make more of an impact. This was really good! keep up the good work!
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| Posted: Tue May 13, 2008 4:34 pm Post subject: |
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Wow. I agree that the second one is quite overwhelming. The bright-greenness of the eye (combined with its size) are startling. I think it could be sharpened a little, as well. Compositionally I'm not sure I like the hair that we can see in the frame, but I guess it's up to you.
I have to say like the first one better, I think. It looks peaceful and almost surreal. Like Sacred said--it looks like wax, almost, because of the black and white.
Are these self-portraits (so to speak)?
Good job.
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| Posted: Tue May 13, 2008 5:30 pm Post subject: |
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| Yes, these are both pictures of my eye haha. |
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| Posted: Tue May 13, 2008 7:37 pm Post subject: |
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That's amazing (and creepy)! I loved it! I really like how the closed eye is black-and-white and the one with the eye open is in color. I've seen an avatar like that somewhere, except it was a red vampire's eye instead...or at least, it was supposed to be a vampire's eye.
I also liked how they pictures look exactly the same except for obvious reasons. That lock of hair is still off the the right a bit.
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| Posted: Sat May 17, 2008 8:36 am Post subject: |
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| big eye! |
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