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Kingdom of Her Heart Chapter 1 (KingdomHearts 2 FanFiction)
Kingdom of Her Heart Chapter 1 (KingdomHearts 2 FanFiction)

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 10:01 pm    Post subject: Yoyo's Crit Requests Reply with quote

I am now taking requests for critiques! Very Happy

What I Will Crit: * denotes what I'm best at.
*Poetry - all genres
Fiction - I prefer short stories. I don't always have time to get to stories with many chapters. But for longer stories, I may edit them in MS Word and post the critique as an attachment.
Action/Adventure
Fantasy
*Historical (I specialize in 1700-1900 eras.)
*Romance
Sci-Fi
Other
Non-Fiction - I can do grammar/spelling and organization on non-fic.
*Art & Photography - Beware, I will rip it to shreds! I'm an Art Major, so add a note if you don't want to become bacon bits. Laughing


What I Will NOT Crit: - a.k.a I'm so bad at critting this thing you would bash me into oblivion because I was so unhelpful. Heh... heh... ^^;
Fanfiction
Novels
Scripts



Bring 'em on!! Twisted Evil *ahem*

And for those of you who demand a crit in return, I'll try to update this with my latest writing endeavor that needs a little tough loving. Wink
For now: Circus Pirates Part 6 You can find Part 1 at the link at the top of the page. ^^ Thanks!

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 2:13 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Congrats on the job! (Becoming an Instructor.) Now, to make you regret you ever got it...heehee.

Feel free to ask for a review in exchange! I'm trying to get another star, hence the link in my siggy. ;P

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post346536.html#346536

Thanks!

~JFW1415

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 2:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey Yoyo Dear!


I've got a poem for you Smile


http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28892.html


Much Love
Oye

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 7:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Done, and done!

~Yoyo Cool

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 17, 2008 2:02 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hello! You asked to know when part two of He's Just Human came out, and I just posted it here:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28953.html

It's not as good, so I need all the critiques I can get. Wink

If you'd like a critique, just ask. I'm trying to get another star.

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PostPosted: Wed May 14, 2008 12:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

*pokes this* I'm still open for reviews!!! Very Happy

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PostPosted: Wed May 14, 2008 12:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hello dear!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29935.html

Please and Thank You!

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PostPosted: Fri May 16, 2008 2:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oye, dear... I already critiqued that for you. Wink

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PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 2:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

If you wouldn't mind:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30168.html

It's Other Fiction, and hasn't gotten many crits yet.

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PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 11:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hello. I am having a little trouble with one of my stories. It is Encantado First Person Parts 1 and 2 in the Other Fiction forum. Be warned, when both parts are put together it is around 5,000 words, so it may be a little long. Any help that you could give me would be greatly appreciated. Thanks. Smile

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PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 11:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Heya. A poem perhaps?

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30361.html

Many thanks,

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PostPosted: Mon May 19, 2008 2:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Azila and Eimear, yours are done. Conrad, yours are going to take a little bit longer, if you don't mind. Smile

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PostPosted: Mon May 19, 2008 3:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

This sucks to the sky. Care to help me?
Be incredibly harsh. I want my protaganist wearing bloodied rags and dying in the street, praying for her life.

Thanks a bunch!


http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post370365.html#370365

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PostPosted: Tue May 20, 2008 3:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hi, yoyo!

You asked that I tell you when part two is up ... and well now it is!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post370964.html#370964

I'm still not completely sure where this piece is going, and I half love it half hate it, so I'm looking for opinions. Very Happy

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PostPosted: Wed May 21, 2008 2:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm back for more dear.


http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30494.html


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