Topic ID: 28876
|
View previous topic :: View next topic |
| Author |
Message |
Sohini
Her Meowness
Speaker of the Forum
Gender: 
Age: 17
Joined: 25 Sep 2005
Posts: 967
Reviews: 380
Country: castle of moon
480 Points
|
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
Rei
E.A. Extraordinaire
Epic Novelist
Gender:
Age: 23
Joined: 01 Feb 2005
Posts: 3140
Reviews: 685
Country: Canada
300 Points
|
 Posted: Thu May 22, 2008 6:45 pm Post subject: |
 |
|
Hey, yoyo,
Here's the next part of The Human Side of Things. Hope you like it.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30556.html |
_________________
Please, sit down before you fall down.
Belloq, "Raiders of the Lost Ark" |
|
| Back to top |
|
Jared
because bears do it better
Master of the Forum
Gender: 
Age: 15
Joined: 07 Oct 2007
Posts: 1570
Reviews: 586
Country: USA
1136 Points
|
| Posted: Fri May 23, 2008 4:28 am Post subject: |
|
|
Hey, Yoyo! You really liked 'I Think I'm in Love' so I think you might also like Run, Fat Boy, Run!. This is just day one. It's been a blast to write. And I need some help with it!
Well, thanks for being friggen awesome all the time!
-Jared |
_________________
If you're a Mormon writer who wants to get to know other people like yourself, or if you're someone who wants to learn more about our church, join The Mormon Club.
"Even a poor tailor is entitled to some happiness!" - Fiddler on the Roof |
|
| Back to top |
|
yoha_ahoy
yoyo
Speaker of the Forum
Gender:
Age: 18
Joined: 28 Aug 2005
Posts: 937
Reviews: 379
Country: living through my third eye
300 Points
|
| Posted: Fri May 23, 2008 6:03 pm Post subject: |
|
|
Thanks for all the requests! I will get to these soon. And I apologize for the delay but I've got an awfully and unusually busy weekend with my graduation and everything, but I will try to get all these done by next week Friday. And it's first-come, first-serve. Thanks for your patience! 
~Yoyo  |
_________________
@(^_^)@ Got YWS? Rick, FTW!
Visit my Site!!!: yoha_ahoy's website
Need something to critique? Check out Circus Pirates!
Need a critique instead? Then visit Yoyo's Crit Requests!
Last edited by yoha_ahoy on Sat May 31, 2008 2:59 am; edited 1 time in total |
|
| Back to top |
|
zoeybird13024
Writer
Gender:
Age: 14
Joined: 20 Mar 2008
Posts: 90
Reviews: 55
Country: United States
300 Points
|
| Posted: Wed May 28, 2008 1:54 am Post subject: |
|
|
'Ello, Yoyo!!! ^^ I know that you're busy, but I came across this and temptation was too much to resist!!!
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28844.html
Critique it if and when you have time! Feel free to move on to the next chapter, too, if and when you have time for that. |
|
|
| Back to top |
|
CK Lynn
Novelist
Gender:
Age: 13
Joined: 18 Jan 2007
Posts: 335
Reviews: 211
Country: United States
300 Points
|
| Posted: Sun Jun 01, 2008 11:08 pm Post subject: |
|
|
Hi. I'd love it if you critiqued this story. It's in Advanced Critiques, and is 16 pages, but if you do it I'll give you 50 pts.
www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30959.html#30959 |
_________________
"Isn't chortled a funny word?"
"You're odd, Beckony."
"Not as odd as chortled." |
|
| Back to top |
|
Lynlyn
the ocean is full of water
Novelist
Gender:
Age: 18
Joined: 08 Apr 2007
Posts: 418
Reviews: 167
Country: Yeah. A little bit country, a little bit rock n' roll.
300 Points
|
| Posted: Wed Jun 04, 2008 4:50 am Post subject: |
|
|
This chapter is lonely...
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30973.html
This is the third chapter, as there are three pieces that precede it - as I told Ari, I don't expect you to critique those, but you can skim them if you'd like, none of them are long. If you don't want to do that, you could just critique the prologue, even though it's a bit old. |
_________________
"Any reviewer who expresses rage and loathing for a novel is preposterous. He or she is like a person who has put on full armor and attacked a hot fudge sundae." -Kurt Vonnegut
Lynlyn's Magical Critique Emporium |
|
| Back to top |
|
yoha_ahoy
yoyo
Speaker of the Forum
Gender:
Age: 18
Joined: 28 Aug 2005
Posts: 937
Reviews: 379
Country: living through my third eye
300 Points
|
| Posted: Mon Jun 30, 2008 9:01 pm Post subject: |
|
|
Okay, wow. I'm back, I think. I tried to get to some of these, but my summer has been SO much busier than I expected, I had to skip a few. If I skipped yours and you still want a critique on it, just post again, and I'll do my best to get to it.
Remember, you are much more likely to get a poem critiqued than a story because I can do that in one sitting. But I will do my best to get to everyone! Thanks for stopping by!
~Yoyo |
_________________
@(^_^)@ Got YWS? Rick, FTW!
Visit my Site!!!: yoha_ahoy's website
Need something to critique? Check out Circus Pirates!
Need a critique instead? Then visit Yoyo's Crit Requests! |
|
| Back to top |
|
Medusa
Senior Writer
Gender:
Age: 16
Joined: 12 Apr 2008
Posts: 201
Reviews: 31
Country: The Sonoran Desert.
300 Points
|
| Posted: Mon Jun 30, 2008 10:55 pm Post subject: |
|
|
If you need a crit, My Dawn With Fox (on my featured works) could use work. :]
--Medusa. |
_________________
Edie: I can't take it anymore. I want to die.
Wanda: why do you want to die?
Edie: Because I just stole $30 worth of underwear at Bergdorfs and I think I might do it again? |
|
| Back to top |
|
PenguinAttack
Dangerously cute.
Speaker of the Forum
Gender:
Age: 19
Joined: 29 Jul 2007
Posts: 889
Reviews: 366
Country: There's just me.
253 Points
|
| Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 5:21 pm Post subject: |
|
|
Hey love,
Life: In which mistakes are made : http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic32468.html
I'ts rated R. But if you could, I'd love you forever. No rush.
*Hearts* Le Penguin. |
_________________
*Rawr*
Read it, Write it, Love it.
Got YWS? |
|
| Back to top |
|
yoha_ahoy
yoyo
Speaker of the Forum
Gender:
Age: 18
Joined: 28 Aug 2005
Posts: 937
Reviews: 379
Country: living through my third eye
300 Points
|
|
| Back to top |
|
yoha_ahoy
yoyo
Speaker of the Forum
Gender:
Age: 18
Joined: 28 Aug 2005
Posts: 937
Reviews: 379
Country: living through my third eye
300 Points
|
| Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 5:36 pm Post subject: |
|
|
I find myself in a need for more points to post a sudden flood of poetry. Please send your critique requests this way!! I will gladly do them soon! 
~Yoyo |
_________________
@(^_^)@ Got YWS? Rick, FTW!
Visit my Site!!!: yoha_ahoy's website
Need something to critique? Check out Circus Pirates!
Need a critique instead? Then visit Yoyo's Crit Requests! |
|
| Back to top |
|
Jared
because bears do it better
Master of the Forum
Gender:
Age: 15
Joined: 07 Oct 2007
Posts: 1570
Reviews: 586
Country: USA
1136 Points
|
| Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 6:54 pm Post subject: |
|
|
ATV Magic
It's a photo... I don't care what you do with it. I think it looks really cool.
-Jared |
_________________
If you're a Mormon writer who wants to get to know other people like yourself, or if you're someone who wants to learn more about our church, join The Mormon Club.
"Even a poor tailor is entitled to some happiness!" - Fiddler on the Roof |
|
| Back to top |
|
Sportgurl46
Senior Writer
Gender:
Age: 15
Joined: 16 May 2008
Posts: 244
Reviews: 59
Country: Hickville
338 Points
|
| Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 10:39 pm Post subject: |
|
|
hey  I just got a poem out and would love for you to check it out here it is:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33727.html
it is called Above It and, i know that it is not the best poem in the world, but i was just wondering what i could fix. thank you |
_________________
please pray for my best guy friends dad who is in the hospital right now. he needs all the love and support he can get. |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
PenguinAttack
Dangerously cute.
Speaker of the Forum
Gender:
Age: 19
Joined: 29 Jul 2007
Posts: 889
Reviews: 366
Country: There's just me.
253 Points
|
| Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 2:48 am Post subject: |
|
|
I love you like chocolate?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post398962.html#398962
If you don't mind? It's called Singed Fingers and Disappointments. It's for a contest and due soon, so be harsh. ^^
*Hearts* Le Penguin. |
_________________
*Rawr*
Read it, Write it, Love it.
Got YWS? |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
