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 Posted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 7:24 pm Post subject: Alainna's happy to help... |
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Hey guys,
The summer holidays are nearly here and so my exams are over and the work load is slowing down, meaning......critique time!
I'll crit anything to be honest - I'm not too hot on poetry though so unless it's urgent please don't ask me for a poetry crit. I also have a specialty in YA and Other Fiction as well as Romance. One thing that I do ask is that if the piece has over 10 critiques already then please do not ask. I also say that I won't critique anything that is already story 'Part/Chapter 3' in or over unless I have critiqued the past chapters/ you ask me to do them all.
Post your link here and I will promise to get it done within the next week!
All the best,
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| Posted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 1:50 pm Post subject: |
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You said you wanted more, so...
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post346536.html#346536
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All done, honey.
Wow, that crit was my first blue star. Yay.
Keep them coming guys!
Alainna
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| Posted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 2:54 pm Post subject: |
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All done, honey.
Wow, that crit was my first blue star. Yay.
Keep them coming guys!
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Thank you! And congrats on your blue star. 
I feel bad asking, but you sound like you want more...I'd love a review on anything I have in my portfolio (except the ones that were last updated in '07. I doubt I'm going to work with them again - I've improved a lot. I may steal some of the plots from them, though, but that'll be years from now with my procrastinating skills, lol.)
Heehee...greedy me...
How about part two?
Part Two: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28953.html
So, yeah. If you want?
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JFW - I critiqued part 2 and part 3. Hope they help.
Choco - I critiqued all of them and if you need more help pm me and don't hesitate to tell me when you post more.
All the best and keep the requests coming YWSers.
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| I need someone to critque my story The Reason (part two). Its in Other Fiction. Thanks a lot. |
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| Posted: Mon Apr 21, 2008 12:03 am Post subject: |
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Please crit!
Thanks Alainna! =) |
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Hey guys!
Choco - a lovely ending dear!
Aestar - I did it!
Wolf - I shall do it tomorrow as I've run out of time. I hope that's OK.
I did it! A good start.
All the best,
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| Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 3:21 am Post subject: |
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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28900.html
I've revised He's Just Human! Could you give it a quick glance? It's due soon...
Thanks!
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You know you love me.
A new story - Repercussions.
Part One
Part Two
Thanks!
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All done, honey!
Keep the work coming in - I will be critiquing despite the little time I get on here now and I will pm you to tell you how long it will take for me to get round to critiquing your work if I can't do it instantly.
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