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PostPosted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 3:45 pm    Post subject: I Must Do More! Reply with quote

Though, I always try and do an indepth critique. My main talents are noticing the oddest things. I'll do fantasy, sci-fi and romance if it's not too cliche. I hate cliches and will advise against them. I'm not a fan of purple prose either, so if you got it, I'll notice. I want fleshed out characters and plenty of development. Good description. I will do any poetry too.

I really want to more, as I'm aiming for Instructor. Smile.

Thanks in advance.

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 1:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It's empty, so...

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post346536.html#346536

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PostPosted: Sun Apr 20, 2008 9:18 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow without realizing from seeing it on here. I did it. Oh well anymore.

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 21, 2008 5:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'd love a critique! Very Happy

(RUNAWAY) Chapter One: paralyzed

It's 'Other Fiction', so let me know if you don't want to critique it, mkay?

Thanks,
Camille xx

PS. Congrats on becoming an Instructor! =)

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 26, 2008 3:13 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Heh, you're already an Instructor. Does that mean no more crits? Wink

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It's the last chapter I'd like opinions on specially, but if you would like to are able to shred all of them, you may do so I'd be very grateful.

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 26, 2008 3:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sure, I'll catch up with these both I promise.

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 28, 2008 5:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Done yar Camille. I wish ya'd posted ya's in chapters Twit. It's much better and saves people with limited time. I really hate it when people all post it in one thread. *bit of a rant*

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 28, 2008 6:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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I wish ya'd posted ya's in chapters Twit. It's much better and saves people with limited time. I really hate it when people all post it in one thread. *bit of a rant*


But it makes a bally awful mess of my portfolio, single chapter threads scattered about like goldfish flakes.

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 28, 2008 8:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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I wish ya'd posted ya's in chapters Twit. It's much better and saves people with limited time. I really hate it when people all post it in one thread. *bit of a rant*


But it makes a bally awful mess of my portfolio, single chapter threads scattered about like goldfish flakes.


Not really. I find I like it like that. Then you know which chapters all the ones you need to work on and the others not starred. You assume you need to fix Wink. Heck I'm not only person who see's it this way.

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 30, 2008 12:29 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I have a poem thats need more reviewing: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29375.html

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PostPosted: Tue May 06, 2008 3:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey Vernon! I need someone harsh and true!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29788.html

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PostPosted: Fri May 09, 2008 12:02 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey Vern

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29935.html

Please and Thank You!

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PostPosted: Sun May 11, 2008 3:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

BBB: Done

Tiffany: Done

AE: Sorry it looks too long, not really a fan of long poetry.

Anymore, if ya really wish it though, I'll do my best.

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Caelestis: Keeper's Throne is a fantasy fiction story/novel I'm working on. It's actually a sequel to my Child of Ashes: Outcast story I was writing, but I decided to work on the sequel as a way to get more background information and ideas for the first story. I only have one chapter up of this story, but I may (or may not, depends) have another chapter up soon. This story doesn't have any reviews yet, so anything you can give would be appreciated.

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PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 9:11 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Done, anymore? It was quite well written, just a tad rushed. Work on that. I'll gladly review again. So anyone else?

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