Just so you know, lyrics have never been my thing, and I think this it horrid, but it's the best song I've ever written. It was inspired by Dance With My Father Again by Luther Vandross
Mama's Smile
When I was a little girl
I would cry when I fell down
And my mother
She would come and pick me up
She would hug me, brush me knees
And then she’d tell me its okay
‘Cause mama, she would be there everyday
And I would, I would
Smile
I would smile at my mother
And attack her with my hug
She was the light I wanted
In the world of darkness
And when I felt like cryin’
I would hug my mother more
And I knew that I was safe
When mama’s smile’s what I saw
When I was sixteen
And my heart had just been broke
I cried for my mother
And I knew it’d be alright
When I saw that smile
I knew just what I had to do
I picked myself up from the ground
And I would, I would
Smile
I would smile at my mother
And attack her with my hug
She was the light I wanted
In the world of darkness
And when I felt like cryin’
I would hug my mother more
And I knew that I was safe
When mama’s smile’s what I saw
And then,
Just as I reached twenty
Mum was taken ill
Daddy told our family
That mummy’s with us still
But I cried that night
Because she wasn’t coming back
And thought to when I knew she’d be there
I would smile at my mother
And attack her with my hug
She was the light I wanted
In the world of darkness
And when I felt like cryin’
I would hug my mother more
And I knew that I was safe
When mama’s smile’s what I saw
I knew that I was safe
When mama’s smile’s what I saw
I liked how you used the kind of timeline throughout the song-when I was little, a teenager, and then an adult. Only criticism I have is that this line: "And thought to when I knew she’d be there" doesn't seem to make sense, and I don't know what you mean there at all. Apart from that, loved the idea, not at all angsty like my previous attempts 
Let me know if you want any more lyrics reviewed, as it's good for me to try to tone these critting skills.
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