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JFW1415
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 Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:33 pm Post subject: Critiques, Anyone? |
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So, Why Are You Posting This?
Because I’m awesome.  Also, I have been on critiquing binges lately, meaning that there isn’t as much for me to critique. I personally don’t like reviewing old work; most of the author’s have edited or are much better, so getting a critique on it is pretty useless. If they post here telling me that they want one, I will gladly do so. This way everyone’s happy.
I also want another star.
What Do You Like To Critique?
-Action/Adventure: I have a lot of experience here.
-Fantasy Fiction: Not as much experience, but I have given several good reviews here.
-Historical Fiction: I’m not the best at this; I won’t know if it’s correct or not. If you get dates and stuff messed up, I won’t be able to tell you. I can tell you how it is as a story, though.
-Romantic Fiction: I’ve also had a lot of experience in this genre, just not in real life.
-Other Fiction: I love this thread; the stories are so interesting!
-Advanced Critiques: I am willing, but expect it to take a little while.
What Don’t You Like To Critique?
-Fan Fiction: I don’t watch much television, and I read really random, unknown books. I can critique ones on Maximum Ride, though, and possibly others. Just ask.
-Non-Fiction: Again, just ask. I don’t want to do diaries and stuff, but there are some things I am willing to do, like speeches. This genre just doesn’t have (much) creativity in it, so it’s hard to critique.
-Science Fiction: You may ask, but I doubt I will agree. I have no experience here.
-Poetry: Go ahead and ask. It won't be in-depth, but I'm getting better at these.
-Lyrics: Can't do them.
-Art and Photography: Same as poetry.
-Scripts: I have no experience in this, but I can help on content and character development.
-Chapter 23: Meaning if you want me to review something, send me a link to chapter one, or tell me about the whole thing in Advanced Critiques. I will most likely critique the whole story, but I don’t want to start in the middle.
-‘Anything of mine:’ Too broad; pick a few pieces and link them. Link all of your work; I really don’t care.
-Critiques with a million reviews: If you still need help with a certain aspect, let me know. If not, I won't critique it - I don't want to repeat everyone.
-Sex: Anything R is fine, as long as there are no graphic sex scenes. (I have a strong stomach, though; I can handle the gore. )
What Are You Good At Finding?
-Grammar/Spelling
-Emotions
-Flow
-Description
-Character Development
That’s off the top of my head. I may be good with other things, I’m not sure. I usually find a lot of things others don’t notice, though.
Do You Have Any Examples?
I’m very different in my critiques (although similar to Cal.) I copy your piece into Word and use Track Changes to fix grammatical/spelling errors, and Comments for the lines that need work. At the end I answer any questions you may have, and give an overall critique of the piece. Sometimes I get lazy and just add an attachment.  Below are examples, since it is rather odd:
-First Kiss <--My new best to date.
-Freedom Fighters <--My second best to date.
-Kidnapped, Chapter Two
-In The Night
Would You Like Anything In Return?
It’s not necessary, but I would always like critiques on my work. Just ask in your post or PM me about it, since the pieces I need critiques on are constantly changing.
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| Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:45 pm Post subject: |
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Hiya! Please could you take a lok at mine:
Here.
If you need me to crit anything of yours, just say!
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| Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:46 pm Post subject: |
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I'd be thankful if you could critique anything of mine really.
You choose
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| Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:47 pm Post subject: |
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 I am sad, because I can't beg a critique for my romance since you've already critiqued it! Oh well.
If you're up to it, Diary of a Villain *hugs her baby* has a new prologue and I am looking for feedback on it. ^_^
Part 1: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic26581.html
Part 2: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic26947.html
I'll settle for only a review on the first part, though. =P
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| Posted: Sat Mar 15, 2008 1:34 am Post subject: |
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I could use more opinions on "The Monster" before I officially decide how I'm going to edit it:
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic26991.html
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We all fall down
I'd be really appreciative if you could take a look at that. It's kind of random and has a lot of out-there metaphors, so if you don't like those kinds of things, here's something else:
Alphess: part one [revised as of 2008/03/11]
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| Posted: Wed Mar 19, 2008 11:43 pm Post subject: |
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Hello, everyone! Me again. I have reviewed (most) of what have been posted on here for me, and many others by the same authors.
I have good news, though!
I will be on a major critiquing spree on Friday, when we have the day off for a teacher's workshop.
Please send me something to critique, and I will do so then! I really want another star!
You may send me as many pieces as you want; don't worry about being polite and only sending one thing. ;P
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This post has been edited as of 3/24/08. A lot has changed; I'm not as vague anymore. Please go check that out.
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| Posted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 9:15 pm Post subject: |
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| Just a question... is there any rating you won't approach, like R or something? |
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| Posted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 9:26 pm Post subject: |
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Snoink: Oh, yeah, I forgot about that. I'll do any rating, just no graphic sex scenes. O.o If you imply something I probably won't mind.
I'll add that to the original post later on.
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| Posted: Wed Apr 16, 2008 8:39 pm Post subject: |
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Okay, okay... here is the link to the first part, though you don't have to start critiquing until part 3 or 4. The first few are good, my later ones need more loving. ^_^ But critique as you will!
Circus Pirates Part 1
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