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Just to let you know, I'm only suggesting that you should try using extended metaphors as you seem to be the person that uses metaphors quite a bit. Don't be under the impression that I'm demanding you to do it lol.
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| Posted: Tue Mar 11, 2008 2:25 pm Post subject: |
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Yes, but extended metaphors are so cool! I think that, as you said, they would give my writing more depth. 
Anyways. Story updates and such:
I have decided to keep her eyes as a gold-brown colour, due to her wolfishness. The plot won't revolve around it or anything silly like that but I think it works, seeing as she spends lots of time with wolves. I did some more sketches for her and I think I've decided on a physical appearance. Next up: personality fleshing-out-ness. Fun!  |
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Wednesday Mach the 11th, 2008
Okay. So, I've decided to re-write my prologue. As in, completely different ideas. Except for the first part, the bit in italics. Si far, I have one sentence: Swift black water rushed by, rolling and knotting like muscle as it slid over rocks and around bends. I am SO lame. 
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