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| B, would be my pick. |
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| Posted: Sat Feb 09, 2008 10:02 pm Post subject: |
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| B 4 me 2. HAHA! |
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| Posted: Sat Feb 09, 2008 11:41 pm Post subject: |
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| I also like B but A is just as good. |
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| Posted: Sun Feb 10, 2008 3:44 am Post subject: |
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| i'm in 4 B |
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| Posted: Sun Feb 10, 2008 4:14 am Post subject: |
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| Coolio. By popular vote, B it is. I should probably mention, that on the map in my head, the capital is pretty much in the center of the realm and the coast a few days ride to the south. =P |
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| Posted: Sun Feb 10, 2008 11:30 am Post subject: |
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Hey! Let's have a look!
a. On their way to the coast, the heroes notice some odd bandit activity, and end up with the opportunity to take out a large bandit gang that has been causing havoc recently.
^Fun but a bit, cause to effect type of thing 
b. They actually are asked to hunt down the bandits, so it won't be conveniently on the way and will take a bit more time since the bandits might not all be together. However, in that route, we could tie in some important discovery or something. If you picked this option, or event if you didn't what would you then suggest for the interesting quest reward?
^Sounds like a plan! Good idea, do that. I think it will fill some space and move the plot along. The top one jsut seems a bit irrelevant to the plot lol |
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| Posted: Mon Feb 11, 2008 3:05 am Post subject: |
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Look! Horizon has a cute little bomb beside it. ^_^
How does everybody feel about the pace of the story? Too fast? Too slow? Needs more fighting? Needs more character development time? Is severely lacking romance? |
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| Posted: Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:09 am Post subject: |
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Hello!
I think what should happen is a surprise attack on the vanguard. When we are moving out, some assassins try to kill us all.
The pace is alright for the story, but it does get very tedious when we're dealing with evryone having to do something if you get what I mean. Maybe a bit of romance would be good, but make sure it doesn't distract form the main plot...
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| Posted: Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:21 am Post subject: |
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| i'm thinking of making my character have some deep dark connection with the Shade, or some other mage in Gela. The idea is still pretty scetchy but it could really help the plot. |
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| Posted: Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:43 am Post subject: |
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| Ye I think we should all do that really, or not exactly but have something special which we all have, and comes useful within the story later on perhaps? |
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