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Eh, I don't know what you mean by your last response. You're just deleting this chapter and starting with the second, or editing it? Either way, I've already critiqued, so just ignore me if you didn't want this. O.o I just want to be up to speed so I can critique 13 like you asked.
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| Posted: Sat Mar 15, 2008 5:22 pm Post subject: |
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Oh yes! I want all the crits I can get, thanks for them.
This is chapter one as well, the first 3 chapters I am rewriting. That is up to number 8 I think.
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| Okay now you have me crying. Why did Aganost have to die? Okay before I cry a river I have to tell you I'm hooked. Now I really want to know what Aedomir is going to do after his captain and friend has passed into the skies. So I'll keep my silent promise and keep reading. |
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| Posted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 11:44 pm Post subject: |
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Hmmm...I agree with Shadow Theif. This definetly wasn't as good as the first one.
Ah well. That is just an opinion on the matter...With as many reviews as you have I don't think I need to critic because I because everyone else probably covered that...
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