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PostPosted: Fri Jan 18, 2008 12:26 am    Post subject: Alaskan Game Show Network Reply with quote

The Caliburogh theater is much too small for our town. It was originally built when Caliburogh was booming (which is hard to believe due to our current economy). Our little town used to be the hub of the county. The builders thought that with all the new people coming into our town, they'd make enough money to keep it open. Too bad that the very next month a terrible plauge swept through Caliburogh and stopped all income of people. So thus the Caliburogh theater has 10 screens which we barely fill. In fact, we barely fill one theater a day. I have no idea how we stay open, but I really don't care. As long as I get paid I'm happy.

I slowly pull into my reserved spot around back of the theater, the van screeching all the way. I park and take the key out of the ignition. The rumbling noise that has lasted the entire ride is finally done. "So, another day at hell Be-Bop...Bop?" I look towards the door and see Be-Bop rushing to the door. Well, rushing really isn't the right word to describe how he runs. It's more of a half-waddle, half-shuffle. "I can see someone wants to get here early." I chuckle and open the car door.

Walking towards the door I notice a green car pulling into then parking light. No wonder Be-Bop ran. The green car belongs to Morgan Hodge, one of the hottest women in all of Caliburogh, and there aren't that many folks (let's just say she's "breast-gifted) . Be-Bop is so incredibly in love with her it isn't even funny. Strange thing is, she likes him (go figure). Neither knows the other one likes them. Funny isn't it?

I stride through the back hallway and into the lobby. Noticing Morgan walk in I quickly occupy myself with the popcorn machine. While I pour in the butter I peak towards Morgan and Be-Bop.

"So...um...what brings you here this early?" Be-Bop asks, acting as if he doesn't even care she's there. I watch him look up. "Oh god..." I snort down a chuckle. He's noticed that she's wearing a really tight white shirt showing a lot of cleavage. This ought to be interesting now.

"Well, I figured I'd watch and early movie, before a line forms."

"Uh...urg...uud...um..." Bop can't even talk right. He's trying his hardest to keep his eyes away from her breasts, but he can't. I better go help him.


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PostPosted: Sat Jan 19, 2008 3:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

'plauge' = 'plague'

'peak' = 'peek' (in this instance)

(Is this part 2? I can't tell. Numbers might be nice... Smile) These are really short entries. Did you ever consider making them longer, so the reader has a little more to sink their teeth into every time? Plus right now, not much is happening, considering that so far we have just driven to the theater. Yes, we are getting character introduction, but not much more.

I am looking forward to seeing where this goes. They seem like an interesting cast of characters so far. Watching them together should be a treat. *rubs hands together*

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