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 Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 9:42 am Post subject: Cal's Colorful Contest *CONTEST OVER, RESULTS IN* |
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“'What is the use of a book', thought Alice, 'without pictures or conversations?'”
- Lewis Carroll, The Adventures of Alice in Wonderland
Oh. Wow. Cal has finally got around to figuring out a contest to host. This contest is based on the pictures or photos being a inspiration to write.
Results
Four stories were entered into this contest, they include: the girl awaiting the return of parents that will never come and her friend: the Arab cynic by Sam, a vivid hallucination in which a druggie comes face to face with inner demons by Kylan, a man who has been reduced to eating grass after the army usurps his farm by smorgishborg, and a boy gets a shooting lesson from his father by JabberHut.
I hate all of you for being amazing and embracing teh awesomeness that is all of y’all’s entries; and, thus making it really, really, really, hard for me to judge. All of you should be inordinately proud of your submissions; they were a joy to read. Give yourselves all major pats on the back.
Some drum-roll please…. and the results of Cal’s Colorful Contest are…
Fourth Place goes to JabberHut with Modern Day Outlaw
Some random comments, by no means a critique.
I love how clear it is that the narrator is over the moon at this father-son bonding time.
Lovely picture use. J
“He stood there on two feet as normally as any beginner would. He held out his gun, holding it with two hands.
Bang! Bang! Bang!
Three bottles down. I gaped. He shot just as fast as my father, and obviously just as accurate, but he didn’t stand like my father at all. How could that be?” – Really like these lines. I love the difference between the Sheriff and the Deputy.
Third goes to smorgishborg with Green-Tinted Goggles
Some random comments, by no means a critique.
“It was sparse, he thought, hardly enough for his present need.” – Love it
“Everyone had a theory, but Wilson was sure that it tasted exactly like India and fireworks.” Lovely imagery.
“It was there that he learned that he had also donated most of his alcohol to the army’s use as well.” – hahaha
I love all the descriptions and anecdotes about the Colonel, they feel like shifty little side-glances, and they PWOAR.
Major Kudos on the HISTORY! *thumbs up*
“So this was his “reimbursement”. Poor gin and weird glasses. It all seemed part of an absurd joke.” – Niiice.
What I think I like the best is the mirror of the crappy alcohol as to Wilson’s state of mind.
I love the ending. 
Second goes to Sam with Another Modern Golgotha
Some random comments, by no means a critique.
Somehow, you managed a cross between Stephen King’s Forgotten Hospital and Channel 4’s Black Books. I’m not sure how you did it, but it made my night, seriously. I could go on and on and glee over things. But, then I’d be quoting at least half the piece.
YAY!
First goes to Kylan with Hallucinogenic
Some random comments, by no means a critique.
Ivan’s inner monologue is utterly amazing. I can hear him in my head, and it’s fantastic. Like a gentleman’s Trainspotting, truly.
“Ivan wanted to pull the bag out and look at it, turn it over in his hands. Smell it. Taste it. Snort it.” & “How do you sip crack, idiot?” – two of my favorite lines.
I especially love the description of Ivan in the mirror.
“because, programs or not, people didn't drop addictions like they would drop a rock. Addictions were like zip ties; there was only one way to pull.” – another amazing line.
I love the feeling of loss I get from the paragraph where Julia leaves. Love the repetition of the windshield like guillotine.
"Rocking back and forth, he counted the beats. One-two, one-two, one-two. Like a tribal tattoo. A bass timpani lodged inside his chest." – Love the imagery that comes out of this.
“He didn't want to be with Todd or Julia anymore. Todd the serial killer and Julia the resurrected.” – Erm, amazing. I heart you to the umpteenth power.
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I will be getting a hold of the top three through PM about their loot very soon.
A small insight into a rather difficult judging task.
I have to say that second and third were the hardest to judge because while, both were oh-so-good, and smorgishborg did rock me with all the history, definite color and picture use, and superfluous army men, Sam won out of because of story construction and character insight, on top of the rest.
To know more about this contest look in the spoiler cut.
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About
Take one of the photos below and write about it, whether it be a story, prose, flash fiction, or poem. A color must also be prominent throughout the piece; you chose the color.
Word count: There are no restrictions on word count.
Timeline: There is no set time that this piece has to be in, it can be modern or from some time in the past.
EXTENDED Deadline: February 08, 2008
Picture Choices
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Rules
> limit one entry per person
> at least one of the photos above must be the focus or start of the entry.
> a color must be prominent throughout, which color you choose is your choice.
> entries must be proofread or I might send you to that special hell.
How to Post
Post your entry in the proper sub-forum on YWS, e.g. Dramatic Poetry or Romantic Fiction. When you type the title in the subject box, type it like this: Cal's Colorful Contest: [Your Title]. Then post the link to your entry here or PM me the link. Somewhere in your entry tell me what picture you are using and what color.
Prizes
Judging will be based on how well you incorporated aspects of the photo and whether color is highlighted throughout. Judging is also based on all those good writerly things, as well, including plot, characterization, diction, style, description, imagery, syntax, symbolism, etc.
First -- Three of Cal's Proper Critiques and a fanmix. To see an example of a fanmix click here.
Second -- Two of Cal's Proper Critiques and a fanmix.
Third -- One of Cal's Proper Critiques and a fanmix.
Best of luck.
Cal.
Entries
1. by Kylan: Hallucinogenic [Part 1] // Hallucinogenic [Part 2]
2. by smorgishbord: Green Tinted Goggles
3. by JabberHut: Modern Day Outlaw
4. by Sam: Memorize Another Golgotha
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| Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 12:31 pm Post subject: |
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| Sounds interesting. Just a question, what do oumena by colour? Like, do we have to mention a colour or something? I don't get it. |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 4:31 pm Post subject: |
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| This sounds like so much fun... I really want to do it, but contests distract me from my novel! *sigh* Oh well, I really like this one, haha. |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 6:18 pm Post subject: |
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| I've got an idea in my head! However, giving my history of contest-promises, you should probably ignore this post. |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 9:03 pm Post subject: |
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Most of those pictures are period images. They've got a certain time tag attatched. Can I chose one, but modernize the setting of the picture in my story? (ie: #2 being an apartment room in a NYC slum)
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| Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 9:54 pm Post subject: |
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*dances about* A Cal fanmix contest? Seriously?
I'm definitely in. ^_^ |
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| Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 10:13 pm Post subject: |
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Yay! People are interested.
Chocoholic,
Choose a color, say it's blue. In your piece blue should be featured in it. Say you are describing a character, his clothes might be blue or his attitude might be blue. Perhaps the setting is blue, literally or not. You can describe parts of the setting and actions in shades of blue.
Hope that helps.
Suzanne,
Ha ha! It's only a little contest. 
Jack,
You can go all-historical on this Jack. I don't really mind. There is no set time line.
Kylan,
That sounds great. I don't really mind about what time-period you place it in.
Sam,
Score!
Ta,
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| Posted: Wed Jan 09, 2008 12:35 pm Post subject: |
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Hah, I have an idea to write about! I'll so join, especially 'cause I have so much time to write it. 
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| Posted: Thu Jan 10, 2008 4:42 am Post subject: |
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Cal, for one of your fan mixes darling, I'd climb a tree, scrape my knee, and break my arm! Okay, maybe not THAT dramatic, but ZOMG this sounds amazing! The pics are perfect perfect perfect, and I'd better get something to enter or I'll be slapping myself upside the head! I shall make time for this!
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| Posted: Thu Jan 10, 2008 5:01 pm Post subject: |
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I guess I'll give it a shot, this is a pretty good idea =)
Question: I can use two pictures right? |
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Jabba,
w00t! Glad I could spark an idea.
Wiggy,
OMG! YAY! OMG! YAY!
Jiggy,
Score!
omgafilangi,
You can use more than one picture, just remember to tell me which. Yay.
Ta, all.
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| Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 6:28 pm Post subject: |
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Hello Cal!
I just finished up my entry, Hallucinogenic. Nine pages long in a word processor, 6,149 words, and...colorful (I hope). Before the deadline rolls around, I'll probably be making some minor grammar changes, etc., but I wanted to have it up in the forums so that everyone could help with my editing process.
Entry:
- Hallucinogenic (part 1)
- Hallucinogenic (part 2)
Picture choice: #2
Color Emphasis: Black and White (I know, creative ^_^)
Hope you enjoy!
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Kylan,
That is so exciting. My first entry.
Ta,
Cal. |
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| Posted: Fri Jan 25, 2008 8:12 pm Post subject: |
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My entry:
Green Tinted Goggles
It begins at picture #4. The color is.... well... green.
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Anyone wondering about the rather curious premise, should read Finding George Orwell in Burma by Emma Larkin. During the Burmese campaign of WWII, legend has it that Japanese soldiers put Green lensed glasses on the army's pack animals so that they wouldn't have any qualms about eating the burned and dead grass on the route. To the animals, as long as it was green, it was good to eat...
While the above may or may not be true, I think it's rather interesting. In my story, I switched the Japanese and the British however. Wilson is either an English man or an Anglo-Burmese, still living in the country at the end of the colonial era. |
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