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 Posted: Thu Dec 20, 2007 11:42 pm Post subject: The Artificer's Angel |
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Just looking for some comments before I finish this.
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| Ess, the main character of one of my two novels-in-progress. Painted directly into photoshop. |
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| Posted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 12:53 am Post subject: |
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This is a little too "Lara Croft Tombraider: PC game" for me. The flying man is very, very computer generated....I mean, it shows way too much?
The details on the mountains in the background could use a fine tuning, as well.
Maybe try drawing it out first and THEN editing it on the comp? I don't know if you can even do that, but if you can I'd try it! 
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| Posted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 1:20 am Post subject: |
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| I'm lovin' it. The only part that feels off is the brown boot things - they look rather flat in comparison to the rest of the angel dude.
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| Posted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 7:11 am Post subject: |
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| That is really good. I use photoshop too, but i could never make something like that directly from it. My only concern is the darkness, it makes it hard to see the detials on the angel. I really like the sun shining through his wing. It looks like an oil painting. I like it very much. Yet another reason to hurry up and read your story.
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| Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007 10:46 am Post subject: |
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That's awesome!
I think a bit more detail and sharpness is needed in the foreground, but I'm assuming you'd do that already. I love the light on the angel guy's arms, but it needs to be carried through on the rest of the picture - I can't tell where your light source is coming from and it's bugging me LOL. Try to bring that through a little more, perhaps.
Overall, a nice pic. I'd love to see the finished product 
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| Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007 4:18 pm Post subject: |
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| I love the wings and his hair but the background seems so dull--I'd have expected a more dramatic scene--and his legs look awkward positioned in that way. Hope to see the finished version.
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| Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007 4:47 pm Post subject: |
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I like this in general but I think the boots need quite a bit more work and I agree that it's very dark so there isn't really a lot of contrast and some of the detail is and to make out. Compared to the angel, your background is very simple and rather plain. Also, the sun/moon shining through his wing is a touch too circular. Try to make the shape a little less regular and fade it out further so it's more realistic.
In general, the figure is well detailed but a little stiff and he doesn't really seem to fit with the background at the moment.
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| Posted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 5:45 am Post subject: |
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This is incredible. I would never have the patience to do something like this by hand, let alone on the computer. I have to agree, though. His boots do look flat in comparison to the rest of him. I love the light saber thing he's holding! Reminds me very much of Star Wars. 
...But that's probably not what you're going for, so ignore me. I've been... what's it called... probed? No, but that'll work for now. I've been reading and watching a lot of sci-fi, so that's all I can think of at the moment, it seams. Again, this looks really cool. His wings are amazing.
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