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rachel eaw
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 Posted: Sun Apr 10, 2005 7:31 pm Post subject: habitats |
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rabbits in holes , birds in nests
it will take too long to mention the rest
the worms and the bugs
the birds and the bees
could live in soil ,nests or honey trees
everything ,even rats will always keep thier habitats
thier is lots of kinds of habitats
for tigers,lions,bears and bats
ants have anthills ,hedgehogs have holes
everything has a habitat
even things like moles
everything even dogs and cats
will always keep thier habitats |
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| Posted: Sun Apr 10, 2005 7:36 pm Post subject: |
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| :twitches: this is original one for me. Rhymes do tend to make me shiver, as did this but it was still nice. I feel obligated to tell you that it sounded forced and that it makes hard on my stomach and I just finished eating. Good job, however. |
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| Posted: Fri Apr 15, 2005 9:16 pm Post subject: |
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| It was... cute. No offense but it sounds like an "introduction to biology" thingy for little kids. The ryhming is too forced. I think that the next one you write shouldn't do rhyme. Try and write an emotion based one. |
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