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| Is It any good cause this is my first poem |
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 Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 9:34 pm Post subject: Myself |
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Hello this is me
I am myself
Nobody else Just myself
There is no one like me
I am my own person
Just another body but special
For I am me
And this is real
And I am my own person
~Ude Dude~ |
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Lollipop
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| Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 10:37 pm Post subject: |
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Yeah! I like this! Go you and write more! 
~Lollipop~ |
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Shadow Knight
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| Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 10:48 pm Post subject: |
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| Do I need to start another chant? ok fair enough, WE WANT MORE WE WANT MORE WE WANT MORE! |
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| Posted: Fri Apr 15, 2005 9:28 pm Post subject: |
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| Umm... it's not terrible, but it's not really one to be proud of. It's clear that it's your first, and with time you will improve. |
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| Posted: Fri Apr 15, 2005 9:40 pm Post subject: |
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| Your poetry will develop the more you read other peoeple's works. Critique will help you a lot and the more you write, the easier it will come. I suggest reading around for now and observing other poets. |
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Rei
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| Posted: Sat Apr 16, 2005 5:28 pm Post subject: |
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| It's really very bland. For one thing, you make statements but don't back them up. |
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