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PostPosted: Mon Feb 11, 2008 4:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Is this the one which you said was about 50k of words? I'll read this in a it when I get time, and edit this post with a review but I'm sure you've ot loads already.

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 12, 2008 10:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
I hope you write a love scene for Terri and Mark at the end!

EDIT: It was fine...

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PostPosted: Thu Feb 14, 2008 2:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
Thanks smorg! I hope these next chapters aren't so predictable. Actually, not too much happens...

However, the section after this has one of my favorite scenes in it, so keep an eye out.

In reference to the love scene: I don't know. Maybe. Frankly, I just don't have the experience to write anything sincere. I'm guessing I did okay though, for what I did write?

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PostPosted: Tue Mar 11, 2008 3:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
I"ve been busy.

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This first scene is probably one of my favorite scenes.

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 6:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
For anyone who cares, I just finished this baby!

Three cheers for me!

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Huzzah! Huzzah! Huzzah!

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I’m worried about what will happen to Eva, on one hand you could have her survive, but I’m not sure that would be really plausible enough. Careful how you handle that.


Just wait and see, my friend. Just wait and see. Wink

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