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 Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 3:50 pm Post subject: NanoWriMo '07-First Sentences |
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First sentences are always really important and even if you're planning to change the way you open your story post your first sentences in bold 
For inspiration, I opened Maximum Ride by James Patterson and fell in love with the first sentence:
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The funny thing about imminent death is that it really snaps everything into perspective.
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Now, as for MY first sentence:
"I stepped out of the car, the gravel crunching beneath my feet, and followed mother into the familiar house."
Not as exciting but...what about you guys? 
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 4:18 pm Post subject: |
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Everyones sentences are so good!
The men lined up in front of the pit.
I think men is too strong of a word.... #_# I need to pull my backspace key off. XD |
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| I 've only written 411 words today and I'm soooo tired of this story already. Hopefully I might get to the target. |
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 4:23 pm Post subject: |
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“The sweat of the brow and the bread of our anxious toil, the result of a day's hard work and knowing that we are ourselves and we are free.” Thus spoke the great philosopher upon his deathbed.
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Trident, I like yours. |
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 4:32 pm Post subject: |
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| wow, everyone's first sentences are soo good |
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| Her eyes were the same colour as overwhelming; the kind of thoughtful sharpness that sees everything. |
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 8:03 pm Post subject: |
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It was exactly twenty four minutes past eleven at night.
Nothing special really...^^; |
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 8:06 pm Post subject: |
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It was dark as Connie was passing the river.
:shrug: not too exciting. |
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 8:17 pm Post subject: |
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| I'll say as soon as I know... I'm writing random scenes from the middle because it's haaard to start a murder novel... |
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 8:28 pm Post subject: |
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Darkness ruled her.
I have the urge to post my first 'chapter'/part/scene up here for edits....x.x |
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 8:31 pm Post subject: |
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Time seemed to stand still.
A very easy sentence to start with... |
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| Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 8:57 pm Post subject: |
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First thing is the quote:
“Friendship is born at that moment when one person says to another: What! You too? I thought I was the only one."
- C.S. Lewis
Then the first sentence:
Our parents all gave us Biblical names.
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Some of these are really good, you guys! |
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