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Treasurebound - Prologue & Chapter One
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kshsj777
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 Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2007 9:47 pm Post subject: Treasurebound - Prologue & Chapter One |
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Several hundred years into the future, mankind has developed the ability to travel among the stars, and terraform barren planets with life from Earth. Using this ability, they colonized the galaxy with the human race.
But unfortunately, the institution of slavery was revived. Poor men, unable to pay their debts. Lawbreakers. Innocent children kidnapped from their homes...
Most planets became members of the Alliance, embracing any and all forms of technology to the fullest. Tempted with the idea of becoming extremely wealthy, many entered into the trading industry. They started becoming corrupt, and greedy, using technology for their selfish ends.
The Nabateans, however are a group of warriors dedicated to old ways of their ancient ancestors, honor, strength, courage and the martial arts.
Meanwhile, a third group exists on the planet Kalanna; people who possess amazing super-human abilities, yet live a simple life by choice.
The Mal Tier, a group that once held control of the Alliance, seeks to regain their power by trying to invent and obtain technology based on the genes of the Kalannians.
Each one of these groups with conflicting interests discovers that one person is the key to their survivals.
One simple slave has ties to them all, and holds their destinies in her hand. |
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| Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 10:49 pm Post subject: |
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This is pretty good! I just have a question:
1. Is the Treasure supposed to be the Christian God?
It did get confusing at times but it was a great plotline. Read over it again a few times, that will take out most of the confusing elements.
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| Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 11:38 pm Post subject: |
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| Yes. |
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