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| I'll steal him, but I don't care, but I was thinking of her bof getting killed anyway and her taking over. So yea.* |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 9:08 pm Post subject: |
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| I read over Tylar's profile, and I think it would be fun to have him chasing around Kurokawa(cause of her personality), not actually obsessing, but kind of helping out the Kadikoy's...you know, like a secret admirer type thing. But if you want him, you can have him.* |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 9:11 pm Post subject: |
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* I think kitty will decided, I don't care so yea, you wouldn't mind killing my BF would you, I don't know how to, unless maybe a random kid comes to the funeral, just don't make it someone you don't want dead  , course unless your charator does it, but yea. I think Tiny is going to take over teh Cobras, hmmm, (thinks) we'll see what happens but he is allowed to die, you don't have to kill him though * |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 9:14 pm Post subject: |
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| Well, I would like to do it myself, to add a little more suspense into the game. K?* |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 9:20 pm Post subject: |
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| *ok* |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 9:33 pm Post subject: |
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She sat fixed in front of her vanity mirror, brushing her now blond hair. She put some temporary dye in it, so that she wouldn't have to re-dye it after wards. It was disgusting. Kurokawa thought blond was the very essence of decay. She despised it.
What was normally straight, was now curly and down around her jaw line. Her eyes were dazzled up in bright colors of eye shadow, but she took extreme care not to stand out. Kurokawa looked nothing like herself, which was exactly what she wanted.
There was a funeral today, and she didn't want to be late. Oh, what a shame that poor kid got killed. She thought to herself. Grinning, she stood from her vanity and took in her proper casual outfit, groaning in distaste. Too bad dear Tiny won't know who I am to congratulate me on being so...Blonde. This time she laughed out loud, and headed for the door. |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 9:56 pm Post subject: |
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Ronny stepped in and immediately scanned the crowd for enemies. Then he came to sit in front of Althea.
"Oh my god! You freaking scared me?"
"Did you tell your boyfriend?"
"That we are gonna join Karikoys?"
"Yeah."
"Not yet." She said. "He really gets annoying sometimes. He never knows when to stop!"
"Oh." Ronny bit into a fry. "It's those pranks, huh?"
"Uh-huh."
A man came up to him and pointed at his tattooed arm. "You. Come outside. Now!"
They both went to the alley. There, another man with an outstreched gun waited. "We heard you goin' to join those Karikoy sh*ts. They killed Antonio. Tomorrow is the funeral. Now, you better declare that nothing's going to happen between you and those as*h*les. You understand?"
He coughed twice. A second later a shot rang and hit the Cobra witht he gun. Ronny raised his hand and shot the other one.
At first he thought it was Althea, but he tried to look into the darkness and he only heard footsteps.
He climbed up to his apartment and fell asleep. |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 9:57 pm Post subject: |
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| You can't make me decide. Hmm. Am I allowed two guys? |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 9:59 pm Post subject: |
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Tanya looked over the car. This would be the pride and joy of the Darks' underground street racing team. After totaling her Skyline a few months back, she was ready to get back to racing.
Before her sat a custom Viper. Tanya had built it herself, using her winnings to buy the parts. It was painted a neon blue with green Underglow, blue rims and green Tribal vinyls. Inside was upholstered in black with silver pinstripes and the guages were black with blue numberings. She had installed the hottest new stereo systems and replaced the back seats with Nos containers. Everything was suited for fast speed, but smooth riding.
Tanya stepped back, to get a better view of the car. Inside the enormous warehouse, filled with lifts and mechanic tools, she and one other had been working tonight.
"Hey, Maria." Tanya said, turning her head slightly towards her fellow. A Hispanic girl, about Tanya's age, stepped out from under the Porsche GT3 that was raised on the lift next to Tanya.
"Damn, now I'm jealous." Maria said, scanning over the paint surface with an expert eye. She was checking for flaws in the coating.
She straightened and looked at Tanya. "I would get me one of these pups, but my Baby's been good to me." She patted the fender of her Porsche.
"I hope this one can live up to the Skyline's reputation." Tanya said, crossing her arms and returning her gaze to the Viper. "Wanna take her for a ride?"
"I don't feel like drag racing imaginary opponents, but I'm dying to see what she can do!" Maria said enthusiastically. They hopped into the car and the tires squealed as the Viper pulled from the garage.
The following day, Tanya adjusted her black dress. Today was Antonio's funeral, Tiny's brother. Tiny was a member of the Cobras, the Darks' allies. Tiny had invited Tanya personally and Tanya felt the need to go. She and Maria would be the only Darks there due to the fact that it was another gangs burial ground. The Cobras rarely came to the Darks' ground. Only Tiny and her boyfriend ever attended a ceremony. It was more out of respect than anything else.
Maria waited outside, the black BMW Z4 idled quietly behind her. This was the car the two girls took on daily errands. Not as conspicuous as the Viper and Porsche. The windows were tinted black, for security precautions, mainly.
They parked near the graveyard and walked over to the crowd of Cobras who looked at them once before continuing talking. |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 10:11 pm Post subject: |
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*Ya, you can make two*
Tiny stood next to her car staring into space. Two more Cobra’s had been killed the night before. She gritted her teeth. She was getting tired of her boys getting shot. Her two ‘body guards’ stood one on each side of her their arms crossed and their faces stiff. They were dressed in suits and Tiny’s black dress fit nicely though she could care less. All she wanted to do was kill the men that had killed the boys last night. They were young, maybe eighteen. One had always fancied her but stayed away knowing one wrong move and he would be killed. She looked at Kevin, her boyfriend, as he walked around. He walked over to her and nodded to the two beside her and they left.
“You ok?” he asked,
“They’ll pay,” She whispered not trusting her voice to talk any louder. He nodded,
“I’ll make sure of that,” He said pulling her into a hug. She let a tear roll down her face. Antonio was the only family she had left. She was going to kill every person that had anything to do with his death. |
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 11:24 pm Post subject: |
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Here's guy number two... and thanks =)
Name= Caleb
Age= 25
Hair= Dark brown
Eyes= Forget-me-not blue
Gang= He doesn't have one. Caleb is headstrong, stubborn, proud, obnoxious and very big headed.
History= Caleb lost his younger brother in a gang fight seven years back so he quit the gang and has been living on his own ever since. He tends not to get involved with fights but when he does, people don't tend to survive. When he falls in love, everything changes and he doesn't know how to act, how to talk or what to wear.
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| Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 11:31 pm Post subject: |
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*I get him XD, the eyes told me that  mwahahahahahahahaha** |
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| Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 1:13 am Post subject: |
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Kurokawa followed the two Dark's to the funeral, staying as far back as she could. They had not seen her, for they were probably too busy talking about their new hunk of junk car. Cars were a waste of time these days. If it drives, it's good enough for Kurokawa.
She parked a good ways down from them, silently pulling her Datsun 280Z to a halt. She got out of the car and followed behind them again, this time on foot, as if she had come with them. Blending with the crowd, she spotted Tiny and Kevin. Grinning, she awaited her perfect moment to strike. |
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| Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 1:14 am Post subject: |
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Tiny followed Kevin to the hole that had been dug for her brother. She leaned her head against his chest and let the tears roll down her face. She didn't care who saw her, her brother had died. The casket was lowered into the ground and she tossed the first dirt on the grave. Her gaurds finished it off for her. She held onto Kevin not looking at the grave, she couldn't, she wouldn't. She sobbed and Kevin kissed the top of his head.
"Its ok," He wispered in her ear. "Go ahead and let it out." She sobbed, silently, she sobbed. Suddenly Kevin became stiff, she looked up at him and saw pain in his eyes.
"Kevin," She gasped,
"I love you." He barely managed to say. His eyes closed and he fell to the ground, dead. Tiny screamed, no they couldn't take him from her too. SHe looked up and saw a blonde hair girl retreating. She took off after her at a run but one of her gaurds grabbed her.
"Let me go, she killed him." She screamed, "I'll kill you!" She was pulled away from Kevin's body and out of site of any other attacks. She sat in a car as some people went after the girl and others quickly carried Kevin's body to a car.
"Tiny?" One of the gaurds called sticking his head in the window. She looked up,
"Yea?" She asked,
"Someone here wants to talk to you, shes from the Darks." he said gently. She nodded and the girl stepped in. Tanya slid in next to her and the door was closed again.
"How are you doing?" She asked,
"I'm gonna find her and kill her if it is the last thing I do." She wispered. She had just lost the two men in her life that meant the most to her.
"What does this mean for the Cobras?" Tanya asked,
"I'll take over," She said firmly. |
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| Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 2:03 am Post subject: |
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Ronny woke up and exited the apartment with a joint in his mouth. HE was clean, dressed in his best black. He would show up at the funeral. No one could do anything about that, everyone knows that killing smeone in the cemetery was plain rude.
As he approached, he noticed a figure standing alone in the bushes. It was a woman. He pulled out his pistol and got closer. |
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