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 Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 11:03 pm Post subject: Poetry: The Cinquain |
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Well, it's been a while since I've done one of these, but these poems are really wonderful in my opinion, so here we are.
First off, thanks to all who entered my last contest, Poetry: The Villanelle, for making it such a huge success. And another thanks to Claw, for inspiring me to start this one.
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| Under the influence of Japanese poetry, the American poet Adelaide Crapsey developed a poetic form she also called a "cinquain." Hers is a short, unrhymed poem of twenty-two syllables, five lines of 2, 4, 6, 8, 2 syllables respectively. |
Now, for this contest, I'll be using a form of Cinquain more modern in nature, and much more interesting.
The modern cinquain is based on a word count of words of a certain type.
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line 1 - one word (noun) a title or name of the subject
line 2 - two words (adjectives) describing the title
line 3 - three words (verbs) describing an action related to the title
line 4 - four words describing a feeling about the titlem, a complete sentence
line 5 - one word referring back to the title of the poem |
Now, bonus consideration will be given if you meet extra criteria in addition to the format already listed. These 'extras' should be mentioned in your submission post/pm if you choose to accept one or both. They are:
1) meet the syllabic restraints of the traditional Cinquain, shown below.
2) use an ABABB rhyme scheme.
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line 1 - 2 syllables
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 2 syllables |
Additional notes:
You may enter 2 pieces, or you may enter one piece of two connected Cinquains.
All original work is accepted. That is, entries need not have been written specifically for this contest.
You may post your entry on the literary boards here or elsewhere if you wish, just make note somewhere on the thread that the piece is for this contest, so I won't mistakenly critique it.
The contest will end Sunday the 22nd of July, at 12 Midnight GMT
Results will be announced no later then Thursday the 26th. Which is, incidentally, Claw's birthday xD
Prizes will be awarded as follows:
1st Place: 5 critiques on the pieces of your choosing, and 2 commissions of your choice.
2nd Place: 4 critiques, 1 commission
3rd Place: 3 critiques
Oh yes, and 1 critique to all who enter |
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| Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 11:06 pm Post subject: |
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mmm. *nibbles Cinquain* I love these. So, you know I'm joining. XD
I was mentioned twice... harrah to me.
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I have some questions...You say to use the more modern form, but then that we get bonus points if we use the rhyme scheme [which as far as I know isn't apart of the style? I might be wrong] or if we stick to the rhythm.
So, then, do we have to use the modern form...? |
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| Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 12:01 am Post subject: |
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Yes, it still has to fit the modern form. All entries do.
EDIT: Oh, and ABABB is one alteration of it..there's like 50 :p |
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| Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 5:40 pm Post subject: |
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| Sounds interesting. I think I'll join =) |
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| Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 6:20 pm Post subject: |
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| Commissions! Sweet, will have to try. |
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| Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 8:13 pm Post subject: |
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Yeah, I wanted to do something different with the prizes. No one really cares about points, so offering those is well...pointless (no pun intended). So I offered more critiques, some commissions (those'll be fun  ) and a crit for all who enter.
So yeah. Submit! |
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| Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 9:48 pm Post subject: |
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oh, look at my amazing poem! 
Romance:
Hopeful, distant.
Loving, laughing, longing.
Captured between missing moments:
Nothing.
I tried to write one with rhyme, but it didn't work so well. And L4 isn't exactly a whole sentence...oh well.
EDIT: I'm also entering this.
Beauty:
Specious, lustful.
Wanting, waxing, weeping.
I hold you in my shaking hands.
Untouched. |
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| Posted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 5:01 am Post subject: Re: Poetry: The Cinquain |
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Novel
Open, profound
Imagine, soar, create.
Go into the unknown splendor.
Believe. |
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| Posted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 5:19 am Post subject: |
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| I made a few minor edits to the original post for clarification's sake. |
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| Posted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 11:29 am Post subject: |
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(No rhyming but syllables checked)
In the Eye of a Rain-drop
Window,
Simple, silent,
Sitting, waiting, hiding,
Barring raining drops, a-dribbling,
Open.
A Love-hate Relationship
Crystal,
Icy, sharpened,
Clinging, burning, hating,
Finding little crannies, sinking,
Melting. |
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| Posted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 5:56 pm Post subject: |
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I'll give it a shot
Snow,
Cold, Relaxing,
Beauty, Radiance, Peace,
It's piling upon me,
Death.
Hope you like it. At least i tried. |
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| Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 10:31 pm Post subject: |
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Is it just me or was that completely impossible?
Midnight
Dark, undefined,
Flicking, guarding, in flight,
Ever-refined,
Nonaligned.
Apologies. I know the rhyming was optional, but I couldn't resist the challenge! |
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| Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 4:48 pm Post subject: |
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The Dance -
Dancing;
Agile, swirling.
Spinning, hurtling, prancing.
Endless hours are unfurling.
Twirling.
Yeah so I tried the rhyme and the syllable count. I think I need the bonus points... |
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| only a few days left! |
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