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Kitty15
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 Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 4:51 pm Post subject: Poetry |
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The title pretty much says it all. The rules are that the poem has to have a maximum of thirty lines and you should post it here so all entries can be viewed by anyone. The contest will end on the 15th June. I know, not a lot of time so get writing! The prizes are as follows...
First place - Four critiques on pieces of your choosing and that means a chapter of a novel, a short story, a poem, a script, a piece of art, a piece of non fiction... Absolutely anything you want critiqued.
Second place - Three critiques
Third place - Two critiques
Everyone who enters will also receive a critique and prizes will be delivered within a few days of the contest ending. Good luck all! |
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| Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 5:30 pm Post subject: |
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Here's mine:
The Death of a Poet
It is spent, no more will come.
The words within have been undone.
I cannot sequence more vibration;
It will not sound so simple, clear.
I thought that I
Could write a poem:
Invoke flaming passion
Or burning feeling
Or heroic oration
Pah
I am not special, I am imperfect:
Residual flaws and reflected faults
Curse my fingers as the pen rolls
From left to right and I slowly
Realise that it is not possible
To transpose pure thought to paper.
“The pen is mightier than the sword”
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whence
look, it's a whence.
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| Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 6:50 pm Post subject: |
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| does it have to be written for this contest specifically? |
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Kitty15
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| Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 7:12 pm Post subject: |
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| Not at all, feel free to use past work. |
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whence
look, it's a whence.
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| Posted: Sun Jun 03, 2007 8:28 pm Post subject: |
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here's my entry
Honestly, Honesty
There’s a dose of truth in every lie;
so up my prescription
and let’s get high
off of the misconceptions,
mistakes, deceptions
barring my mind
from that measure of truth
I strive to find.
There’s a shot of truth
in every act;
so fill me up
in between the cracks.
Flush out my sorrows
of days long past:
a momentary rush
that never lasts.
Honestly, honesty
is just a drug,
a primate phantasm
swept under rug.
There’s a grain of truth,
in every fib;
so raise my dosage,
to breathe and dip
this betrayal, like a jail,
is making me frail--
so drink it down
or swallow it whole,
and let the fragment of truth
envelope your soul. |
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regalredstar
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| Posted: Wed Jun 06, 2007 6:10 pm Post subject: |
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Enigma
It is near, very near.
Yet far, oh so far.
It’s harder than rock,
Yet softer than silk
It is salty, it is sweet
It is messy, it is neat
It is difficult, very difficult
Yet easy, very easy
It is smoother than Ivory,
Yet rougher than bark
It is harsh, it is gentle
It is questions, it is answers
It is an odd thing that happens
Yet normal in the world.
It is diffcult to answer
Yet its clear as day.
It is a puzzle, it is a mystery,
It is future, it is history,
It is an enigma
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Wow this poem came together far easier than I thought it would! Techinically i'm supposed to be sorking on my scriptfrenzy script, but by the looks of what i've written today, my scriptwriting switch is turned to off and my poetry switch is turned to on.
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Sumi H. Inkblot
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| Posted: Wed Jun 06, 2007 6:17 pm Post subject: |
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I am SO in. 
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"The cold words on the page
Depicting worlds, full in song or sorrow
The dead or the boy who shoots the arrow
Banners of war, unfurled in unholy rage.
The red slashings of the friend
The blood of the words ooze across paper
Blood and wounds of letters, bound by poet later
Until the ballad finds its end.
The sound of pen, healing the wound
Mending their broken red gashes
The crooked scrapes and raw scratches
The words honeyed by new courage found.
And though the warrior of the pen
Slips into the cold grasp of death
A speechless hand, an essence at rest
And the healed words say again:
"Even though we turn pale at age
Tested and withered is our page
Our voices, small and bold, breeze and thunder
We shall continue to speak of ageless wonder.""
This is probably my best... |
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| Posted: Wed Jun 06, 2007 8:35 pm Post subject: |
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Madame Clarinet
She’s cold at first –
A long sleek body
dressed in black with
silver buttons lining her
front and back
Everywhere
and from her hollow eyes
She stares out at you
waiting for you to kiss her.
At first you don’t dare
and only finger
Her long sleek dress
your hands lingering on
Her silver buttons
as you let your minty hot breath
wash over her body
and slowly she starts to smile.
She opens up to you.
It is time.
You hold her tighter
and press her closer to your chest
your long delicate fingers
encompassing her.
You bring her closer, closer still so
Your mouths can meet –
Your lips and then your tongues
and slowly you let your minty hot breath
play into her.
And your love comes out as
Music. |
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| Posted: Sun Jun 10, 2007 6:21 am Post subject: Where We Belong |
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Where We Belong
In my world, which I create with words,
Dragons swarm in the wild, free air.
The grass is green and the sky so blue,
Truly, that is where I belong.
In your world, which you create with steel,
The air is foul (I) can hardly breathe.
There is no grass and the sky is gray,
And that is where you’re trapped to belong.
In my world, which I create with magic,
Brave hearts are ever-ready to rescue.
There is unity, there is true spirits,
Honestly, that is where I belong.
In your world, which you create with greed,
People are selfish, catering only for their needs,
Wars are fought and peace is buried
Is this where you choose to belong?
In my world, which I create with care,
Cruel witches are always defeated in the end.
“Good overcomes Evil”-that’s the first rule
I swear that is where I belong.
In your world, which you create with power,
You let the bad show their wrath and rage.
There is no rule, no promise is kept,
I know that isn’t where you belong.
In my world, which I create with love,
Joy is pure, it knows no end
You are welcome, would you care to join?
Believe me, t’is where we both belong.
that is my entry! |
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Kitty15
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| Posted: Thu Jun 14, 2007 10:01 am Post subject: |
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| Today is the final day for submissions. The winners will be announced tomorrow. |
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Kitty15
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| Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 4:53 pm Post subject: |
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Okay, I've reached my decision...
First place: Snoink
Second place: Whence
Third place: Ofour
Congratulations to these three and all who entered for some very good pieces of work. You can either pm me or post the links for the pieces you want critiqued here. Remember, one critique to all who entered, two to third place, three to second and four to first. |
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| Posted: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:46 pm Post subject: |
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Sweet. Critique whatever you feel like in my portfolio, it's not very big.
Congrats to Snoink and Whence! |
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Kitty15
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| Posted: Sat Jun 16, 2007 7:55 pm Post subject: |
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| Hehehe... I would if the portfolio link was working =) |
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