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Postby Ofour on Sun May 13, 2007 6:16 pm 

A working title of the four "(Not)" My poems:



(Not) My Prayer ( viewtopic.php?t=15466&highlight=)

(Not) My Friend ( viewtopic.php?t=15623&highlight=)

(Not) My Music ( viewtopic.php?t=15785&highlight=)

(Not) My Life ( viewtopic.php?t=15896&highlight=)



What do you think of these four as a series? Do they work well together?



Any comments would be appreciated.
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Postby Ofour on Mon May 14, 2007 4:03 pm

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Postby Ofour on Thu May 17, 2007 10:25 am

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Postby Fand on Wed Aug 15, 2007 5:36 pm

Bad Ofour! No bumping! I'll take a look at these and let you know, yeah? But next time a topic's being ignored and you really want opinions, PM authors you know and trust with the link and ask for help. Bumping is bad etiquette!

EDIT: I have to admit, the "(Not) My Friend" poem didn't come close to matching up with the others, in terms of quality. But disregarding personal opinion about the poems: yes, I think they work nicely as a series, though the progression feels jumpy; you might want to rearrange them?

Personally, I'd remove "(Not) My Friend" and order it thusly:

(Not) My Life
(Not) My Music
(Not) My Prayer
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