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xanthan gum
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 Amusing, and I liked how it showed the tie in to the backward haunting thoughts of your mind. I wish there weren't so many capitals, but the format make sense for the sake of adding an independently standing and important phrase.
Your latest poems are witty; you've found your simple style. But I'd like to see a bit more in the next effort. |
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| Posted: Thu Aug 30, 2007 3:00 am Post subject: |
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| lmao! XD you're brilliant. Absolutely brilliant. |
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I agree with everything good everyone else said xD
Great work (: |
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| I like how you made yourself seem so vulnerable. Did you really have a dream about suicide? I like how to gave the wind personification you made the poem sound even cooler by doing that. Overall it was short, but very well written |
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