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PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 9:04 pm    Post subject: Black And White Reply with quote

Black and White

I listen as music blast around me. Groups of socialites find and cling to one another, as I take my normal seat... but all is still.

Lips move... but there is no sound.

Legs move... but all is still.

Bodies move... stillness surrounds me.

Arms move... but all is calm.

Colors are black and white, as if I look though an old fashioned TV.

Fights break out.

People break up.

Students duck in and out of doors, while others shove their way to the last brownie made of unnamable brown goop.

They seem so normal, as this hour goes by. They forget how much trouble we’re in.

Our world is collapsing and we are allowing it to happen. –Am I the only one who sees this? Why do we sit and do nothing?

I listen. A nothingness blasting all around me. Those who know –those who see stand watching as I write this.

There is sound... but there is not. Screams of the lost, cry their warnings.

There is a stillness around me... but there is movement. The movement of those who blink with time, who pulse with rhythm.

There is a calmness around me... but there is not. Minds buzz with unwanted news. News they try to push out of their brains.

Bodies move with knowing as those who know watch our future slip slowly though our figures.

These people are our future. We are the people... will we be ready? Or will we slip though the sands of time, unwanted and forgotten?

I sit and I watch. –And I ask myself...

Will I be ready?


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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2007 6:48 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow, i really loved that, it sounds so calm in such a crazy atmosphere?

I think your writing style is very unique, its almost poetic and beautiful.

Well done, amazing!

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2007 10:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting...I really enjoy it. There are some really powerful phrases in here, and some of them I agree with or could relate to. I like the way you keep saying things like "Lips move... but there is no sound" and "Legs move... but all is still". I think that this was very well written. Keep it up!

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