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Prayer to Our Lady
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A.O. Avalon
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 Gender:  Age: 23 Joined: 30 Nov 2004 Posts: 119 Reviews: 72 Country: Mt. Vernon, Eye-oh-way 300 Points
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Posted: Fri Feb 11, 2005 10:38 pm Post subject: Prayer to Our Lady |
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For the most part, the Catholic church and I stay out of each other's way, but I've always loved the Virgin Mary and her story... so here's my tribute.
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Our Lady of Compassion
Our Lady of Grace.
Outstretched arms and silent marble smile;
Your china blue eyes
Reflect the light of a thousand candles lit,
apologies uttered,
thanks murmered,
prayers lifted up
to GODONHIGH.
Are you really His angel,
albeit without wings;
The sweet soul who softly wept
when they laid in your arms
your only begotten son
still and cold as your
marble effigy?
Or were you more like me,
a real woman I mean, a flesh-and-blood being
who screamed and fought and cried
when they took him from you?
And did Anna hold you as you wept,
giving the comfort only Mother can?
Did she offer up a silent plea for both of her miracle babies?
I have so many questions to ask you
Mother of All mothers,
But your stare does not waver
and your pale lips do not part.
So instead I drop my change into the donation box,
Light my candle and whisper a private prayer:
In the name of the Father,
and of the Son,
but most of all the Mother,
We Pray.
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_________________ "El sueño de la razon produce monstrisos"
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A.O. Avalon
Senior Writer

 Gender:  Age: 23 Joined: 30 Nov 2004 Posts: 119 Reviews: 72 Country: Mt. Vernon, Eye-oh-way 300 Points
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Posted: Fri Feb 11, 2005 11:21 pm Post subject: |
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| I'm not really digging my title, any suggestions? |
_________________ "El sueño de la razon produce monstrisos"
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Lollipop
The shizney! Novelist

 Gender:  Age: 17 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 442 Reviews: 263 Country: Scotland! 'Mon the Scots! 300 Points
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Posted: Tue Mar 15, 2005 7:35 pm Post subject: |
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I think your title is good and your poem is very good and descriptive, keep it up, you've definitely got a talent!  |
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