Reg Carter The choice was inevitably the gang's, as Riley knew I'd be following her like usual. Not because of any stupid feelings that seemed to be haunting my mind recently, but because of the same reason I'd always stayed. I'd made that promise , just like I had to my sister. I liked Riley's ide...

Hey there! The first thing I noticed and liked about the poem, whether it be intentional or not, is the way you've structured it. By spacing each line away from each other it kind of makes the tone droney and slow, much like boredom. I enjoyed that. Essentially it is quite a simple poem, with you us...

This thread is totally pointless, irrelevant and silly, yet it grabs all of YWSer's attention...

...much like Bolt.

Hey there! I've got to say, this is not just amusing and sarcastic, it is a brilliant poem in itself too. Apart from odd structural points where lines feel too long and uncomfortable to read such as this particular stanza: Look at what peace has come to this land. To this realm once so barren withou...

Done Elinor.

Hey Elinor, here as requested. (: My comments/suggestions/improvements are in green for you. Thomas Pike placed a single red rose on top of the mounds of others which that surrounded Annie Ryan’s coffin. The word "which" should only be used as a connective if you want to split the sentence...

Do you think Reg and Riles will get together pre the end of the 4th and then they're the two that go and find the rest of the gang or some't?

hey there! In terms of structure, this is one of the best poems I've seen on YWS in a long time. I loved the exploration of emotions and the choice of colourful language you used in each stanza. My favourite verse was this one: Love. I endureth your pain now. Oh, sweet tyranny... Your punctuation is...

Hey there! Up until the line "Stab me..." your fluency is very well devised through well chosen punctuation and word choice, however from the line "Stab me..." youe fluency is very jumpy, your word choices make the lines seem choppy in pace and the punctuation seems a bit scatter...

Hey there, This is a very thought provoking poem and naturally one each and every person on YWS can relate to. We all have that heavy conscience of whether or not we're needed, if we're still being helpful. I really like this poem for bringing up that point and the language, pace and content all lea...

Hey there, I think the most interesting thing about this poem of yours is the topic. In cultural poetry that rebels against something, like you seem to be doing here - modern day, how its run and all this - it is important to raise a subject in question. I love the way your language shows your passi...

Done guys.

Hey there, as requested: Naturally, I'm going to start with the language. I liked it a lot, it was very flowery, very impressive and very decisively chosen. Although it would have a very specific audience, noticably the people who can understand and grasp effect from your choice of the words, it sti...

Hey there Kyousuke, here as requested. Sorry you've been waiting for this review a while, but I hope it helps all the same. My suggestions, comments and improvements will be in red . Chapter 1 - Conflict “Hang in t here, you’ve still got a purpose to serve.” I personally think "there" soun...

Reg Carter It was classic that everytime I went near a door something crazy or dramatic occured and when passing the front doorit was no exception. Riley burst in, a grin stretched across her face as she leaned over and caught her breath. She was wearing a white vest and tight denim jeans and she l...