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Crayon
stuby, pink with a ripped slip. :)
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| there were a few little typos...Lol! says the queen of typos...but other than that i think its pretty good, its just i was a little confussed when it started and the house was making them fight, im still a little confused. If Rachel wasn't the killer then why would she fight around the house? |
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Vernon
Always shall Love Elizabeth his Beautiful Goddess
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| Posted: Mon Dec 26, 2005 10:55 am Post subject: |
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| Very very Good love it, scary good cliff hanger |
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