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Caligula's Launderette
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2005 5:08 pm Post subject: rambling flyers -- P13 for content |
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I just wrote this in class...a bunch of thoughts...yeah I'm having a very textbook ADD day. it formated differently on the computer but c'est la vie. otherwise enjoy.
CL
rambling flyers
dolly flings herself
from bridges
everyday
trying to find the truth
in words
and mementos
fates to spend eternity
searching for the answer to
life
even though its at the
bottom of the
film canister
left in the moldy
glove compartment
carl spends
his last dollar
on day old liquor
and warm beer
trying to
erase all
the memories
of
nights alone
with nothing but
his red gaping soul
bared for only
the stars
and the moon
to see
dora watches
the people patter along
below
from
her upstairs
apartment
waiting for
the white knight
to carry her away
into the
blazing sun
patrick
--so petrified with
shady tampered rivulets
of blood
scathing the
inside of the pale pelt
of the inner thigh--
scrubs himself clean
with
a dirty rag
trying to salvage
his own
sanguine smeared skin
wondering
if he’ll ever stop
lying to himself
about
liaisons in dark always
the
way
lips feel against his skin
and
how another’s
flesh feels inside
peter runs headlong
into the brick
wall
that so resembles
sanity
and relationship
he’s determined
to cave
it in
at it’s base
his mother
maria
so full of grace
injects
knowledge of ancients
and poetry of
kismet
with the ability of
a user
the jail cell
of repeated historical fact
is a cage
and
people call her
addict
but she’s so sure
she’s normal
this addicted to beauty |
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ohhewwo
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Posted: Tue May 17, 2005 3:26 am Post subject: |
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I like this one a lot.
I liked the way you named characters and described them. ... Which was the whole poem, but, I like it!
Were these people real or fictional? |
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Posted: Tue May 17, 2005 3:28 am Post subject: |
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| this was cool, i never thought of a poem this way, nice thinking, and what ohhewwo said, are they real or ficticious(that spelled right?) |
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Caligula's Launderette
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Posted: Tue May 17, 2005 4:31 am Post subject: |
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fictious, the names just came to me, except for patrick's I went to babyname.com and put in the meaning I wanted and got that name...but then again I watch too much SVU so some of my stuff comes wierdish semi-true story as Jimmy would say.
thanks you guys for commenting.
cheers CL |
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Jennafina
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 9:13 pm Post subject: |
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| Wow, I really really like this! Id like to print it and hang it on my wall. I love how in only a few lines you gave each of the charecters a story. It reminds me of that beatles song 'all the lonely people'. Do you know it? |
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Caligula's Launderette
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 11:56 pm Post subject: |
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thank you jenna. I am really glad you liked it, hang it on your wall its on mine. Yeah I heart the Beatles, that reminds me I need to find my 1 cd. good song too.
thanks again
CL |
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Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 6:36 pm Post subject: |
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| It really is fascinating what the brain can produce out of bordome. This is generally not my kind of things, but I enjoyed reading it, nonetheless. |
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Posted: Fri Jul 22, 2005 12:59 am Post subject: |
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| nice formation. just like a cross puzzle. |
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